Please no ES'ers.
Thank you
Sadie
You were the foundation in my past
The touchstone that kept me upon solid ground.
The light that lifted me from me from darkness that did surround.
You gave me your love and sweet kisses when in my most dire time of need
You have loved me always unconditionally.
You have been in my life for so many years
The love I have always cherished,
The thought of you removed from me brings constant tears and pain.
For the love that I share with you, no other can claim.
You have loved me always unconditionally.
Your age has come to show others that you are slowing down
Yet, I still see you the as when we found one another.
I am called selfish for not wanting to let you go
From the illness of that which you now hold
For those of you who know me and my writing, your thoughts and suggestions.....
Peace & Love,
Sam
2007-11-06 15:14:33 · 5 answers · asked by Sam 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I just noticed that the third line of the first, has (2) "me from". Please remove one, for only one "me from" is needed.
Thank you
2007-11-06 17:55:02 · update #1
To H.B.
Interesting reply. Since you do not allow email for personal contacts, I must post on this upon the open forum for all to see.
Can you be more specific as to why? Please, feel free to give a detailed and educated opinion as to why this piece holds no interest for you.
Thank you
Sam
2007-11-08 18:13:46 · update #2
To H.B.
Interesting reply. Since you do not allow email for personal contacts, I must post on this upon the open forum for all to see.
Can you be more specific as to why? Please, feel free to give a detailed and educated opinion as to why this piece holds no interest for you.
Thank you
Sam
2007-11-08 18:15:09 · update #3
If you don't mind me saying so, it's a quite good piece, telling of a seemingly lifelong love. Seems you have had Sadie to care for you a long time, and though age is catching up, you can't see that, only the Sadie you knew when young. Very well written, and a really romantic scenario. I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing.
Dondi
2007-11-14 12:02:12 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think this is a genuinely touching piece of work that pulls at my heart. I dread to think of parting with loved ones and i have already lost all my grandparents and my parents. This puts into beautiful words what we all will feel and experience sometime in their life. As far as the first person who said it held no interest for her...she has no heart. Excellent Sam. I am moved deeply by this and wish you the best.
2007-11-14 12:45:40 · answer #2 · answered by The Dark Prince 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I was lifted up by your sincerity and how you expressed so deeply your emotions. Like you were constantly having to reopen your heart and expose it to others. Marvelous work!
2007-11-14 12:02:24 · answer #3 · answered by Semp-listic! 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It reads as a story and as a poem.
2007-11-06 20:51:32 · answer #4 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
doesn't hold my intrest
2007-11-06 15:21:47 · answer #5 · answered by H B 3 · 0⤊ 2⤋