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Question

I am wanting to start writing childrens books. Here is one I wrote a few years ago tell me what you think. Thanks.....

LITTLE ABIGALE
ABIGALE’S CHRISTMAS WISH


Abigale wants to know,
If it will ever snow.

“Mommy why is there no snow?” she asked
“It has to do with the weather outside.” replied her mom
“When the temperature is really cold,
The rain will turn into snow.”

With this Abigale went to her room,
Where she placed a wish and hoped it would come true.

Christmas is just two weeks away,
And by her window Abigale would stay.

Then one day her mom came to Abigale’s room.
“What do you want for Christmas?” her mom asked
“I want a white Christmas” Abigale replied
“No toys, no games, no bike?” her mom asked puzzled
“Nope, all I want is a white Christmas and that’s it.” Abigale said positively

For the next week Abigale sat and waited for the snow.
But her mom just didn’t know.

It’s Christmas Eve and still she sat.
“God I want it to snow this year please.
Can you tell Santa for me.
I don’t want any toys, or games, or a bike.
Just a Christmas covered in white.

With that said,
Abigale went to bed.

That night the wind began to blow,
And the air turned oh so cold.


And then wouldn’t you know
It began to snow.

Christmas morning has arrived,
As Abigale opened her eyes.

She didn’t run to the tree,
Instead she ran to the window to see.

And there it was a Christmas in white.
As Abigale and her mom enjoyed the sight.

A wish is never too big or too small.
God and Santa listen to them all.

Answer 1

You seem to have some writing skills, and I personally believe you should pursue your writing ambitions. However, I am not a good critic for children's stories since I write fiction for a much older reader.

Do a net search for publishers (and magazines) who publish children's material. Send them some of your stories, or query them on longer material, and see what happens.

Answer 2

You are proper approximately the frame - your mind begins to rot, turns to liquid, and so forth. But your brain (psyche, soul, spirit, and so forth.) or persona isn't your mind on my own, even though the mind is an overly most important aspect of you. Without it you are going to no longer be equipped to specific your persona bodily to others who customarily engage with you bodily (I shall no longer contact at the non-bodily interactions). As lengthy as we're "within the frame", we'd like our mind to specific ourselves, simply because the laptop demands the CPU to role. But whilst it's going for walks, the application is greater than the CPU and application (0s & 1s). Once the two are introduced in combination by means of the programmer and customers, some thing starts to exist past the PC and the application (saved on records) on their possess. That's an analogy, however expectantly you get my flow. Hence, we're customarily mindful of an "I" that's no longer simply my mind or ideas. And I am mindful of the "thous" which might be my household, peers, and so forth. There don't seem to be simply brains en-fleshed. They are truly personalities. It is that this "I-thou" that persist after dying, Your declaration "there is not any proof of any spirituality in any respect, when we die, there may be not anything, we don't observe the transition" is a perception and will in no way be demonstrated scientifically for the reason that technology will in no way receive any "proof" that's no longer repeatable and simplest situated at the memories of individuals. But many individuals have had after-dying studies. The reply in your query is person who every one among us will uncover out in the future. There is not any averting it. The extra most important query is that if there may be an lifestyles after dying, what's it like, and what are we able to do to greater get ready for it?

Answer 3

Very good!!! You should get an agent and start submitting your work to publishers!!

Answer 4

oh, cheers,,, this is what i really call as writing skills, as simple as it can be with words, but rich in thought and plot, something really introspecting, i loved it , and would love to read more,,,,
anyways good luck,,,,
my wishes for your bright future with pen

Answer 5

it is very nice.like it.although i dont celebrate christmas

Answer 6

This is really good, I like it!! :)