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Question

My name is - and I am running for Student Council. I am
dedicated, responsible, and enthusiastic. These are three words that describe me, and three reasons why you should vote for me. I cannot promise that if I am elected we will be allowed to chew gum or have no homework. But I can listen to what you, the students have to say, and pass it on to the faculty. I will try my best to meet any student requests. If that isn’t good enough, then I am not the person to elect. The only promise I can make is that I will try my hardest to help you, the students, have a memorable school year. Some ideas I have to improve the school are: more fundraisers. I believe that I am qualified to represent our school because I get good grades.


I feel as though I would be a good representative for the Mrs. Robinson’s class because I listen to everyone’s opinion and make intelligent decisions that would benefit the class and the school as a whole. If I am elected, I will try to make Highland Creek Ele

Answer 1

good except dont say "i believe i am qualified" or "i feel as though i would be a good representative". never use the phrases "i believe" or "i feel" in any speech. u want to sound convincing and firm. just say "i AM qualified" and "i WOULD be a good representative". ("i believe" and "i feel" are redundant because it's your own speech so obviously everyone knows it's your feelings/beliefs since u wrote it).

other than that, all good.
good luck =)

Answer 2

Do you mean Speech?

A few suggestions:
My name is - and I am running for Student Council. I am dedicated, responsible, and enthusiastic. These are three words that describe me, and the reason why you should vote for me. I will listen to you and pass it on to the faculty. I will work very hard to meet the student requests. This year will be a memorable school year because I will be your elected representative, which will connect the student body and the teachers. I am very excited about fund raising effort, clubs, and I am open to hear your suggestions in how to better our school

I feel as though I would be a good representative for the Mrs. Robinson’s class because I listen to everyone’s opinion and make intelligent decisions that would benefit the class and the school as a whole. If I am elected, I will try to make Highland Creek Elementary ...... Good luck to you buddy!

Answer 3

I think your contents are very good. You need to fine tune it though.

Your opening statements are somewhat redundunt and non-impressive.

For example, you could say
"I am three things - dedicated, responsible, and enthusiastic. These are three words that describe me, and three reasons why you should vote for me. See the play on the word 3 happening 3 times?

Either that or you could simplify it. For example:
The best way to describe me are, dedicated, responsible, and enthusiastic, and those are three reasons why you should vote for me."

Also, "pass it on to the faculty" is not something you should say... that means you will just "pass it on." Instead, you could say, you will "negotiate with the faculty, and do my best to make it a reality."

"because I get good grades" also isn't a great thing to day. It will turn off many students and rest will say " so what...?" Instead, you could say, "because I work hard on all of my responsibilities, and it shows on my achievements" or "grades".

I will also say "I will listen to you", not "I can listen to you." Former is a promise that you are making and latter is an option. You can listen but you won't? You don't want to imply that.

Get rid of this one. It doesn't mean anything.
"If that isn’t good enough, then I am not the person to elect."

It's too obvious.

Good luck.

Answer 4

You can cut out the " you, the students" bit. They know who they are.

Don't give them a reason NOT to vote for you! That never works. Concentrate on why they SHOULD!

Don't say, "The ONLY promise I can make.." Just say "I promise......." and make that the last line of that paragraph.

End with your Name again.

Answer 5

I would add, "If you elect me, i will make all of your wildest dreams come true."

Perfect!

No just kidding... but it sounds pretty good. I wouldn't flaunt your good grades though. You need to give more examples of what you plan to do as a student coucil also. I don't know what you want to do, so i cant suggest anything.

Answer 6

no offence

but that was a bore,


at my school at least


you need to have a personality, rather than be some strait a studen, no offence.

then again, I just read your in elementry school.

You'll be killer, you get em =]

Answer 7

thats good!
good luck