song? k...it goes like this!
lightning in the skies
angel sits on the stairs and cries
no one ever tries
to dry those weeping eyes
(chours)
angel from the darkend skies
angel those pierced wings still fly
angel always try
angel please dont cry
you there on you throne
your heart is made from stone
only angels can know
our pain, we're not alone
(chours)
lying in her bed
dark thoughts are in her head
some times she thinks shes dead
from her people fled
(chours)
standing on the bridge
wondering if life's worth it to live
no one's sensitive
to know she has to live
(chours)
help is on the way
u'll find ur place one day
ur life's creme burlee
is still sweet, dont delay
chours
repeat.
soo....do u like it!
b honest!
wut should i call it!
thanx 4 ur time!
o, and im only 14, so is it @ least good 4 my age?
2007-11-01 12:58:31 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
It's interesting, don't know where you came up with creme burlee besides it fits in the rhyme. I think you need to decide if she jumps or not. Don't think killing herself will get her into heaven. How about: Angels feel my pain. Try to figure out the ending and keep writing more.
2007-11-01 13:13:33 · answer #1 · answered by Minot_1997 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
All the time! I have an older sister, who's nearly excellent. She's a mannequin, she's proficient, every body loves her. I consistently suppose rather disregarded and consistently in her shadow and moment great. Know what I imply? And while my peers are circular they consistently suck as much as her. It feels terrible, considering it is like they've come to peer HER instead than your self. Emma xo
2016-09-05 07:47:34 · answer #2 · answered by helsley 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it. You seem to have quite a poetic gift. Keep writing, keep journal, get a copy of Writer's Digest and look up places that are willing to print your work in their books and magazines. Being a writer is really tough work. So, if you want to be a writer you must do 3 things Write, write and write. And when you are not writing you should be reading all who came before you.
Good luck and God bless you.
2007-11-01 13:04:18 · answer #3 · answered by JOHN 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good for 14 but I don't like it cause I am old and I wrote stuff like that when I was 11. But do not stop writing. EVER. Do not stop writing.
2007-11-01 13:01:39 · answer #4 · answered by 1proudcloud 3 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Its pretty good for your age imust took efort to make, if you listen to concrete agnle by martaina mcbrida it might help with yout sound. great song!
Good luck = ]
2007-11-01 13:03:26 · answer #5 · answered by tpsullie 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its cute keep up the good work. Remember opinions are like butts everyones got one and they all stink! If you like it then its good!
2007-11-01 13:06:09 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its like every other song. Its trying to be depressing. I mean its not bad...but its not good either...its ok...It just doesnt seem real, it seems like you just wrote words down and thats it. No feeling.
2007-11-01 13:01:58 · answer #7 · answered by Lizziebanne 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It might get better if u made ur lines more consistent
2007-11-01 13:03:59 · answer #8 · answered by demonxy5 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was quite good, and maybe call it Lightning.
2007-11-01 13:02:50 · answer #9 · answered by Amy B 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's good but I think it rhymes a little too much...
2007-11-01 13:01:19 · answer #10 · answered by J| 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋