My thoughts are the memories you gave me of a lost town in my mind where we fall through the seasons to a more innocent time!
2007-10-31 08:15:36 · 6 answers · asked by Steven A 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Rock and Pop
It's kind of wordy, but I do love the idea. There's so many pronouns. To gather an audience, lose the possessive as much as possible.
The idea isn't a new one. Songs in different styles with similar theme:
Poco - Ghost Town
Cheap Trick - Ghost Town
Deana Carter - Strawberry Wine
Stone Sour - Made Of Scars
Bobby Goldsboro - Summer (The First Time)
Steve Wariner - The Weekend
Skylark - Wildflower
Tim McGraw/Dancehall Doctors - Red Ragtop
I'm sure there are more, but check these songs out for ideas and apply them to what you feel.
2007-10-31 08:28:48 · answer #1 · answered by Your Uncle Dodge! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No that's kinda cheesy. How this - -
My thoughts are wasted, memories vague
The barren streets of my mind, are like some useless plague
We fall through the seasons, wallow in crime
I want to escape through, to a more innocent time. . . . . . a more innocent time. . . . . a more innocent time. . . . I live to see you. . . . in a more innocent time
2007-10-31 15:25:13 · answer #2 · answered by foxfire101 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Makes no sense, runs on and on, and I don't see how it could be sung without sounding very annoying, because it has no meter of anything.
Rewrite it.
2007-10-31 16:27:07 · answer #3 · answered by Chronon 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good, but it kinda sounds run together. Good luck sweetie.
2007-10-31 15:24:14 · answer #4 · answered by Dizzy 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
cool
2007-10-31 15:26:05 · answer #5 · answered by +ceecee+ 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very deep, very complicated too
2007-10-31 15:19:35 · answer #6 · answered by bearebelchick 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋