my life was dull and boring
till i met you
you brought me something
something quite special
something quite new
i have never felt like this
wanted anything so much
i feel pure bliss
wanting this more and more
even having never felt your touch
how i long to be there
helping you through aches and pains
i would sacrifice because i care
i'm in love i know
i know for sure
no thinking twice
i'm hoping you feel the same
because to me...
this isn't a game
this is serious
and i want to know...
with the up above,
do you agree?
now that we know
we will be together
we'll do this right
blow by blow
step by step,
we'll take each others hands,
we'll soar
like birds of a feather
what do you think?is this good?or bad?critism please...thanks.
2007-10-31 05:39:29 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
its so nice isnt poetry great you are very talented and you should probably carry a pad and carry a pen and paper with you eveywhere you go to be able to capture every ebb and flow
2007-10-31 05:43:23 · answer #1 · answered by emma_undoo 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think if it is your true feels then its awsome, but I think you could dig deeper, dig until you get to the veins of your heart and when you think you have found it dig further, and when your mind spills out words it will look like you have drawn your heart on the paper.
2007-10-31 12:45:34 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
take out blow by blow.
and then yes it is very qood.
it is like a story.,
and it makes my imaqination qo wild.
thinkinq about what it could be about like what situation and every thing
--yess qot all sappy.
bt i love it.
(o:
2007-10-31 12:42:58 · answer #3 · answered by fo sho dawwww 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Omg it is wonderful. Wow xx
2007-10-31 13:59:03 · answer #4 · answered by tony s 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think i love it
2007-10-31 13:02:16 · answer #5 · answered by BILL 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Best One Yet!!!!!!!
2007-11-01 16:27:18 · answer #6 · answered by Caynmarko23 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋