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The establishment of AITA in January 1970 was the manifestation of the struggle of the developing countries for their rights to sovereignty over their natural resources, the spirit of which was in line with that of the Third World *and then* has driven the country, MYS, to take part in the struggle as the member of this organization.
2007-10-29 16:27:23 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
I would suggest breaking up this much too-long sentence into smaller sentences, and editing a bit where it needs editing. This would help the reader to understand the content a bit easier.
"The establishment of AITA, in January 1970, is the manifestation of a Third World struggle that involves a fight for rights to sovereignty over their own natural resources. It has become the driving force behind MYS' decision to become an active member of this organization."
Hope this helps!
2007-10-29 16:39:37 · answer #1 · answered by It's Ms. Fusion if you're Nasty! 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Try "subsequently," Thus your statement will read thusly:
The establishment of AITA in January 1970 was the manifestation of the struggle of the developing countries for their rights to sovereignty over their natural resources, the spirit of which was in line with that of the Third World *subsequently* has driven the country, MYS, to take part in the struggle as the member of this organization.
2007-10-29 23:41:31 · answer #2 · answered by Clara Nett 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the sentence is too long.
I suggest you put a full stop or period after resources and then start a new sentence, thus: "The spirit of this initiative was in line with that of the developing countries that has driven MYS to take part in the...."
The use of the term "Third World" is now considered offensive by counties labeled that way which prefer to be called "developing countries".
2007-10-30 01:09:30 · answer #3 · answered by Lance 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is used correctly but it doesn't sound right.....how about "... with that of the Third World and subsequently has driven..." just an idea
2007-10-29 23:37:42 · answer #4 · answered by barb 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's a huge run-on sentence. In fact, according to your puncuation, it's one sentence. You need to make about 3-4 sentences out of that one. And it would be "and then drove the country".
2007-10-29 23:37:01 · answer #5 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. This is incorrect grammar.
2007-10-29 23:37:29 · answer #6 · answered by flax9 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Change "and then" to "that has".
2007-10-29 23:35:23 · answer #7 · answered by Ashley C 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋