it and i just wanted to share it with you. please give me any criticism you want. idc.
Creepy crawlers haunt my decayed brain as all these destructive, horrible thoughts you've made me live with are turning from caterpillars to butterflies in my stomach, and are creating a black hole of pure hurt and death inside me empty soul.
I look around me but I am blinded; blinded by the pain and torture you have caused me. I try to regain sight, but know that this is just a fantasy. Nothing is possible anymore. You took all my hopes and dreams and shoved them into your suitcase along with a bunch of old, meaningless memories and my slashed heart that has been being tortured for these last few days.
I am now just trying to find the white towel so I can just throw it in and quit. But I can't find it. I admit that I may have the ability to find it but something is still pushing me through this, telling me that I haveso much to live for, so much I can actually accomplish, (read on)
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and a girl whom I need to find and be with. It's a little thing called love and it is indestructable even under the most difficult situations and pressures.
All I can promise is that I will never "find" the white towel; I will keep on going.
And if one day I feel like "finding" that towel and giving myself up, I will find some courage, some hope, some life in love that will force me to dye that towl pink.
2007-10-29 13:00:02 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
AND IM ONLY 12 SO DONT BE TOO MEAN
2007-10-29 13:09:23 · update #1
The imagery is really excellent at times. Other times it's overused, like "throw in the towel." Also, this is actually a work called "poetic prose," in other words it's not in poetic form and doesn't have many poetic devices like rhyme or meter, but it DOES have poetic imagery, such as packing your hopes and dreams in a suitcase. Keep writing, you have talent.
2007-10-29 13:10:58 · answer #1 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hmmmm very expressive, i like how you poured all your thoughts into it, and all the metaphors, like the white towel, i can really feel what you're saying..believe me i've felt the same, i write poems like this all the time...i just put pen to paper and write down my thoughts
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2007-10-29 20:11:45 · answer #2 · answered by *Fluorescent Adolescent* 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow you are a great at writing!! that last one is cute :)the first one is awesome too.
2007-10-29 20:08:15 · answer #3 · answered by ς.S. Haida 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋