good-bye
Frail am I, but still with desire,
Old and wise, but God I'm so tired.
I dream of you, lying right next to me,
Trying so hard, figuring what not to be.
I'm totally beaten, but no sleep tonight,
My eyes burning red, as I hold you tight.
Sleep precious angel, Sleep while you can,
Even though I am older, I am still a man.
Will you remember, all the words that we said,
As we made our way, up and into our bed.
You dream tonight, as I yearn for more,
Slowly I drift off, not wishing for war.
Swallow the taste, that you once craved deep,
In my bitter blood, you lay in your sleep.
Closing my eyes, I kiss you good-bye,
You just roll over, not even a sigh.
2007-10-29 11:31:00 · 10 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It is the death of the man. Either a metaphor for an inner death, or perhaps a literal death. That's how I read it.
2007-10-29 13:13:32 · answer #1 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Longing to be near the one you love, missing her in her absence... nothing wrong with that I guess. Better live to the maximum your emotions, rather than feeling numb. And well, regrets concerning the time lived here on Earth, many years in search of happiness, happiness found only now, but enjoy it, all is not lost...
2007-10-30 04:48:41 · answer #2 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ouch. Thats pretty depressing. Nice though.
2007-10-29 18:34:17 · answer #3 · answered by Abby B 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh, baby!!! Don't say good-bye. I love you. This poem breaks my poor heart. Is very emotional, your angel is proud of you.
Your angel
Marilyn
2007-10-30 07:50:19 · answer #4 · answered by . 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
seeking answers to a qustion u know but accepting it is hard and the pain is great yet u have hope and its not so much your age as it is fact The poet
2007-10-29 19:21:45 · answer #5 · answered by wordologist 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I see nothing wrong with it evcept it;s perfect,,you always write straght from the heart and your poems always have lots of meanings instead of just words.,, keep writing as your a great talent,
2007-10-29 19:50:02 · answer #6 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the poems good as always. I don't see you being though as being depressed. you just seem a bit weighed down... as if something is bothering or stressing you.... am i wrong?? ...take it easy no matter
2007-10-29 19:10:08 · answer #7 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey did ya make thast up
yay pretty good
i hope you;re ok
joking
very nicely done....im gonna copy and paste and save
i wanna keep reading it
2007-10-29 18:35:31 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you sound depressed that's really sad maybe make it a little happy *turns emo* I mean keep it like that
2007-10-29 18:35:26 · answer #9 · answered by darkfuryregioner 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow that was deep. good job. hope you feel better soon.
2007-10-29 18:40:17 · answer #10 · answered by mrs_pipesmoker 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋