Can you guys critique this poem I recently wrote? I'm also open to suggestions. Thanks
Heaven’s Divine
What is this from which God’s hands have created
That absorbs and flares my heart, such tempest?
With gentle strokes from the brush of perfection,
And heavenly radiance selected for your coloration.
Let that enchanting complexion be your frame,
And let that beauteous tracery be your name.
With adoration, He paints you most meticulously—
The divine gift that reflects your refined elegancy.
2007-10-28 20:25:47 · 3 answers · asked by Alvin 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I think you have done a quite good job of telling of divinity.
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2007-11-05 09:16:16 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is Heaven's divine because the speaker marvels at the mysteries of God's wonderful art of creation - the brush of perfection, heavenly radiance, enchanting complexion, beauteous tracery, and refined elegance are all expressions which suggest supreme beauty and perfection beyond mortal beings. Indeed the speaker refers to the creator as He with a capital letter reserved only for the heavenly Lord!
Nice sweet poem. God bless your efforts.
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2007-10-30 08:26:04 · answer #2 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
try for the same character at last word
the rhyme too
the meaning can be individually
2007-11-04 12:41:36 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋