What Do You Think Of This Simple Little Poem About A Complex Issue?

Question

(Yep, I wrote this. It doesn't rhyme but it doesn't have to.)


WITHIN THE HEART'S DIMENSIONS


There are as many dimensions of love,
my friends, as there
are people capable of feeling love.

Always embrace the dimension you are
comfortable with.

Never offer more love that your heart can spare
and, in return, never expect more love
than you will need.

Only define
love when you wish to restrict its intent
and remember feelings offered to you
do not have to be returned in equal
portion because
love can not be
valued this way.

Be fair, be brave
and be sincere
and someone will
always be there.

Again, it's difficult to select a 'best' answer when there are more than one deserving that title. So I thank you all for your sincere replies.

Answer 1

I really like this doc.
Your poem is an honest and truthful affirmation of what love is.
It shows us the many facets of love that are sometimes difficult to define.
You so eloquently and effortlessly write the words that others feel but may have difficulty conveying.
It offers mature solid advice that many will be able to reflect upon.

Maybe you could start writing a book entitled " My Reflections" or something similar. It would have all of your beautifully worded thoughts and prose.

P.S. I would leave out " My Friends"

Answer 2

"Never offer more love that your heart can spare
and, in return, never expect more love
than you will need. "

I in fact liked this line in particular. I've gone through a lot of personal life lessons that drew me to the same conclusions about the levels of use of emotion and effort.
Some of this I learnt from a psychologist called Dr. Paul.
It was him that stated everything we own is 100% under our control. Life-experience, learned knowledge, intution, time and emotion are personal resources. It's up to US to manage these effectively and not let anyone take our resources without our consent, or squander them away frivolously.
This is why people feel bad in one-sided relationships, both romantic and work-based.
So this is the reason that I liked that line.
Apologies for not critiqueing the poem a little more. It IS very good.

Answer 3

It is fantastic. This is art. I agree with 'manhar', as well and I would like to know the author and the book names. It looks to be a poem on Earthly issues, except the line: "My heart, dear sister, sings in his hand-" if this is within the poem. I would rather say this last part: "Can you match the notes of that song, little swallow? I am first in his field of girls! My heart, dear sister, sings in his hand- love never harmed a winged creature" must be some of your message. This case, as you said "dear sister", I think that you are His child, your Father - GOD's loved child. Else, I do not know any man's hand for a woman's heart could sing such way, in his hand. I'm lucky as you (but you are a girl) to feel our God's warm hand. But nothing else is without pain. Is it? This is Life _ I'm afraid I mix-matched a lot of songs and notes _ But I also do feel that true love is also down here, on Earth. With or without matching poetry, or songs !? True love must have always some to communicate directly and nearly.

Answer 4

Doc, after reading over your poem several times, and each time getting more from it, I have come to realize that I have not been living any of the tenets your poem proposes. I think if I could live my life more in tune with the poem's precepts, I would not be forever disappointed by love. I feel your poem has much wisdom to offer the reader who wants to become less entangled in meaningless romances and strive towards understanding what they can freely give and receive in love without an undercurrent of resentment and loss of independence.

Answer 5

nice short poem indeed but how would one observe this rule:- "Never offer more love that your heart can spare"!!