"mindgames"..is very long but i would appreciate it if you would read and comment for me.?

Question

There under the stars she sits
eyes closed, he by her side.
in her mind she see them both
dancing
hand in hand
under the stars so bright.

She views her life like a radio
sometimes it plays good songs
other times sad songs,
fun songs
and tough songs.

Each with a different beat symbolizing
a different emotion. to over come each emotion is
a challenge difficult to comprehend most unfit to handle
truth of soul and mind combined truth of the true struggles of this life
flee and seek refuge in the mortal world
a world of twisted allusions and flawed in site to what
true perfection really is..

This world is tainted by those
seeking first to judge before acknowledgement of the victims soul or personality
throwing aside the honorable actions and qualities of one, instead we mortals
see through vanity and unfair judgement and later claiming it was simple
human instinct when really it was fear of the rejection that would come in hand
if having defended the victim.

Yes it is a tainted world in which we take our residence,
tainted by the creations made to so say "protect"
only later destroying that which it was meant to help.

Tainted by the mortals that live somehow justifying unthinkable
actions for unfathomable reasons,
if such a person is seen as a leader
millions fall to his tainted leadership.

This tainted mirage of unjust masks many people from the truth
of mind and soul.
forming a sea of chaos almost impossible to overcome
like that of human emotions.
umong the stars here...
is a different story...
each song is complicated and diverse like that of
true understanding.

Then of course the commercials
they act as the temptation of better things.
promising new and exciting aspects
taking away the beat of life
meaningless objects,
promises
all lies,
they are no doubt the many many commercials
this which represent the darkest of emotions
this which are to blame for the corruption of humans.

She sees them
there in her minds eye
together they stand
hand in hand
life's song in the background.
though there are many commercials
the two always seem to make it back to the music
still hand in hand.

Then she hears it..
the beat in the background is changing.
they dance hand in hand their dance of
innocents,
of forgiveness
of understanding and confusion alike.

They dance to the beat of triumph
to the beat of faith,
faith and hope.
hope that they may still be together.
even after the next sad song
angry song..or hurt song.
they dance, dance with the hope that
through all the many commercials
they can still make it out
and get back to the beat of life
without temptation.

At last she opens her eyes
to the world around her,
then she stands up as does he
alone together they stand.

Here under the stars their
feet kicking up the dew on the soft
evergreen grass.
here they dance
under the stars
not really sure even of who they are..
eyes seeing nothing but each other
to the rest they lay blind and unknowing.

Hand in hand they dance
the radio of life no longer only
in her mind but flowing through
her very fingertips filling his as well.

Travel far to the stretch of grassy land
where the stars shine enough light to over throw
even the mighty sun
travel till all sound of the world you once knew leaves
and silence stands guard.
look not with your eyes but with the
depths of your soul.
feel the caressing tease of the winds as they blow
taste the safety of your mind and soul coming together.

There you will see them,
humans with the gift of true understanding
as well as the will to continue
there you will see them,
the moon their spotlight.
dancing to what seems to
be no music.

Just
adjust the dial a tad
and you will hear their
intertwined soundtracks
sad,angry,hurt, happiness, sadness, joy and pain
all emotions combine yet you will notice
as the beat changes one thing remains consistent
...that they never give up
never give in.
commercials come and go and yes the two
slip and struggle,
but in the end they always come out,
there under the stars
hand in hand.

Now my traveling friend open your eyes sad little mortal
and discover the two have fled.
only your ears and since of touch active now.
your ears picking up the sound of the wind breezing among the grassy plains...
the feeling of the air whipping around you
yet caressing your skin ever so lightly..

don't give into the illusion of this simple life you
have come to live and know
of pain and hurt
just look with your soul and mind
combine
discover true understanding and tolerance.

Only then
will the winds take shape
forever together
still hand in hand.
only then will the vail of tainted humanity fall away.

Forever and only then the key to acknowledgement
will reveal itself to unlock the soul
your wondering..
how to bring forth this key to this sort of......
utopia..
this garden of Eden.....
this place of true perfection...

The answer lays withing the beat of the radio
understanding is all in how you decipher the
life in which you live
discovering just what you are
what makes you yourself
is all in how you dance.

Now...
listen close.....
close your eyes
picture this simple poet
for that is all I really am....

I am at the gate,
feel the beat....
the pulsing vibrations...

I will ask only one question
ponder it well,
tell me now...
as I stand before you,


"Shall we dance?"

Answer 1

Nice philosophical piece. This is particularly appealing and true:

This world is tainted by those
seeking first to judge before acknowledgement of the victims soul or personality
throwing aside the honorable actions and qualities of one, instead we mortals
see through vanity and unfair judgement and later claiming it was simple
human instinct when really it was fear of the rejection that would come in hand
if having defended the victim.


Shall we dance now?

good luck