CHLORINE
The elements have faded
I'm jaded, I'm jaded
All the while, standing there
I waited and waited
We belong together
Don't you see? Can't you see?
Say you'll stay till Ever
Don't leave me, love me
I'm down on my Luck
And I'm giving up, giving up
This misery's enough
I've had it up
...to here
And I fear
As the end draws near
Alone I will stand
Again, again
I'm so lost
Can't see things ahead of me
Running on empty
Complicating things that shouldn't be
I shouldn't be
Find me waiting and waiting
To finally see
Finally Be
I want to Be
Just flippin' Be
Near you, to speak to you
Speak to me
Share your life, spend some time
On me, on me
Share your love!
--Adrian L. Cooper
What are your thoughts?
P.S. I wrote that in 10 minutes! d^_^
2007-10-24 21:16:59 · 11 answers · asked by agieagieagie22 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
9.5/10. It speaks well about the human condition.
2007-10-24 21:19:37 · answer #1 · answered by AxisofOddity 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
9/10
2007-10-24 21:43:04 · answer #2 · answered by anna 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well it looks good but I cant give it more than a 5 just because I can't hear it, I recommend making a myspace music page and you should record it and upload it. The fact that you wrote it in 10 mins is pretty amazing.
2007-10-24 21:23:17 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
ill give it an 8 or a 9, if you wrote that in 10 minutes.... or did you mean it took 10 minutes to post it on here????
2007-10-24 21:20:12 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked it , thought it was pretty good
One small suggestion , change to word "Flippin" to something else more universal
It doesn't fit with the song to me
Great job though
2007-10-24 21:20:50 · answer #5 · answered by banjaxed 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
its good. But its to much of a common love song. And some words are a little bit cheesy.
(my opinion)
So I'd probably give it a five out of ten.
2007-10-24 21:35:51 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
8 marks for you.
2007-10-24 21:21:39 · answer #7 · answered by Nizam89 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
10 - you have talent
2007-10-24 21:19:35 · answer #8 · answered by Lefty 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's great. You're talented.
2007-10-24 21:19:57 · answer #9 · answered by the Boss 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
cool song, but why did u choose chlorine as your title??
2007-10-24 21:20:47 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋