My father's funeral (sharing the grief)?

Question

Can you feel my greif
Wooden Womb

I do not recall who was there
just that there were so many
the church was overflowing.
I sat there staring at the flag
that draped the closed wooden womb
where your body lay seperated
from the living, in my case the half living.
Father Becker, your favorite priest
delivered the funeral mass
in his gentle, comforting voice
no comfort did I find.
I could not grasp anything,
or anyone around me.
My heart, my mind, was up there
on the altar beneath the flag
inside the wooden womb with you.

Answer 1

Beautiful.

If you want suggestions, don't change any of the words, just add the proper punctuation where needed. For example,

I do not recall who was there(,)
just that there were so many
the church was overflowing.
I sat there staring at the flag
that draped the closed wooden womb
where your body lay seperated
from the living(;) in my case the half living.
Father Becker, your favorite priest
delivered the funeral mass
in his gentle, comforting voice(.)
(N)o comfort did I find.
I could not grasp anything,
or anyone around me.
My heart, my mind, w(ere) up there
on the altar beneath the flag(;)
inside the wooden womb with you.

Other than that, amazing. :)

Answer 2

You expression of grief is a healthy first step on a long and mostly painful journey back to joy. Everyone grieves in their own way and in their own time.

If you feel stuck or overwhelmed in your grief, take a look at Griefshare .org. to find a grief support group in your area. I help facilitate such a group at my church and have seen comfort come to many who are in need.

Answer 3

i can feel your pain, your sorrow here. I lost my father as well, so I know the pain of losing a daddy. Daughters hold daddys as very special human beings, no other can truly know the treasures our daddies do bring.

Answer 4

This is beautiful free flowing poetry Marilyn T.
my sympathies for your loss; just beautifully expessed.

Answer 5

I am so sorry for your loss. I know exactly how you feel. Awesome poem!! May you find comfort knowing you are not alone.