I wrote a novel two years ago here is the synopsis would you buy it?

Question

Society through the use of genetic advancements is now able to test for genes that cause every type of imperfection, from criminal and anti social behavior to mental retardation. because of this ability it becomes law that anyone with any genetic flaw must be erased. The reason for these erasures is that there will no longer be crime or the need for medical care, everyone will be perfect. When a woman becomes pregnant she must submit to the testing and if the fetus is found to contain genetic flaws it is erased. Only those with pure genetic lines are allowed to exist.

Many people run in order to remain in existance but are often tracked down by the Erasers and removed. Only a few make it to saftey. These few are helped by Easers who are sympathizers. These Erasers falsify their reports and assist the targets to Ben's Valley where they begin new lives.
After several years the Perfects discover the existance of this group and seek to remove what they call the stain of imperfection from the world.
These imperfect people are called The Outlaw Children. They only seek to continue to be but are thrown into a fight for their existance.

he book is available at amazon. com it is called Outlaw Children Sacrifice and Redemption.
I know quite a bit about copyright it already is has been for two years LOL
I know that from the synopisis it sounds like quite a few other books and movies but believe me it is totaly different.

Paul genetic alteration is available but it is costly and only the wealthy can afford to have it done. But even at that some wealthy people choose not to have it done for moral reasons.

for anyone interested email me and I will send you a preview

Bardsandsages,
I AM intersted in the answers and have gotten some pretty good feedback some of it from you. However the cover is not a stock cover and does have a great deal to do with the book.
My question was intended to see what I might do differently in order to improve the book as I am working on a revision. As I said I have gotten some feedback that has been very helpful but to address your accusation of my personal perjudices shining through I have none the book is written from the view point of one of the characters. I do however see that perjudice against self published writeres does shine through in you response. Thanks for the help. And all the best

Answer 1

Yes, it sounds like something I would buy and enjoy. Is it available for purchase?

Thanks for the title - I'll order it from Amazon.com -

Answer 2

*sigh* such blatant self-promotion is one of the reasons self-publishing authors are frowned upon in traditional media. YA is not suppose to be used for overt advertising, which is ALL YOUR QUESTION is. It's not like you actually care about opinions. The whole point of your "question" is to try to attract attention to your book.

While the plot premise is good enough for a sci-fi novel, you make all of the classic mistakes of a self-published author. You used a stock Lulu cover that has nothing to do with your plot. You should have spent the time and money to find a good illustrator to get you a nice looking cover. Your cover is dull and lifeless. I found your preview at Lulu. The editing is horrible. The very first sentence of your preface is a grammatical nightmare. The perface is also boring, as all you do is dictate a series of facts. Your own personal prejudices shine through, and you basically dictate to the reader how they are suppose to feel about the subject before the story even begins. Your formatting is non-standard (professional books indent paragraphs, not put spaces between them).

In short, if you are going to self-publish, you have an obligation to make sure your book is properly formatted, proofread, and edited. This is an example of why I always caution writers against self-publishing until they understand the industry. What might have been a good book with the proper care of a professional publisher was released onto the world a mess.

Answer 3

There are decided problems with your plot. Scientific advancements are getting to the point that "being erased" will be something that doesn't need to happen because the genetics will be "repaired" before the baby is even born.

As to no one needing medical care, what about car accidents? Football injuries? Accidental poisonings in children? You have an interesting premise, but I recommend that you change it to MANDATORY genetic manipulation (now THERE is a conflict!) to "improve the genetics" - there really is no such thing as "perfect genetics" - only "bad genetics" which results in inherited diseases and conditions. Learn a lot more about genetics, and see how your premise might change. Keep trying though - if its well written and thought out, you could have a winner on your hands!

Answer 4

It actually sounds pretty interesting. Except for the, "Erasures" and the "Outlaw Children" those names could be cleaned up a bit and the book sounds like it would be good. I'd definately buy it - I love a good read. Start it out in paper back though. I'm too poor for hard-back.

Answer 5

I might check it out of the library. It's kind of hard to figure out what your true plot line is from this sketchy synop.

Whatever you do, stay away from PublishAmerica. Not only are you to pay for the printing, but they look you into a contract that is impossible to get out of. A friend of mine made that mistake and now he's not able to get his third book published by a reputable publisher because of this aweful mess he got himself into.

Answer 6

Ooh, yeah. I'd read it. I'd be curious how imperfect people could possibly defeat perfect ones, if it came to that. They'd need the medical care that isn't available. They'd be weaker both physically and mentally.

Answer 7

Not that i believe in any way this would be appropriate it does sound interesting and would read it if i was stuck at the airport with nothing else to do

Answer 8

No. I`d wait 4 the movie.

Answer 9

I wouldnt buy it but my mum would, sounds interesting but isnt there a movie about that with clive owen in it

Answer 10

I kind of sounds like 'The Giver' and '1984' all rolled into one...i'd read it...sounds awesome