He was wild, crazed, and reckless. He saw through bloody eyes. His mind was slightly altered from the norm. He constantly fought off demons and evil spirits. Still, he had high hopes and expectations. Along with his militant mind frame came organizational skills beyond comparison. His name was Demetrius. However, people called him meech. He was a poo poo head.
2007-10-23 10:18:34 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
XD Love it!!
All this dramatic detail, and then... "He was a poo poo head."
Dude. This kicks ***!! Is there more? =3
2007-10-23 10:26:33 · answer #1 · answered by Panda 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds to me like this guy's mind is more than slightly altered from the norm. Remember, Stephen King said "the road to hell is paved with adverbs.". Your adverb killed that sentence dead. As for the rest... well it really did nothing for me. In one sentence the guy is wild and reckless and in the next he has "organizational skills beyond comparison". Isn't that contradictory? And as for the last sentence .. I will just leave that one alone. It is just silly and adds nothing to the work.
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Pax - C
2007-10-23 10:37:25 · answer #2 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, didn't do anything for me. It sounded like you were describing someone with multiple personality disorder who also suffered from poor bowel control.
2007-10-23 10:32:23 · answer #3 · answered by goldie 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was really good! until poo poo head!?
2007-10-23 10:26:32 · answer #4 · answered by ~Super_Ginger~ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋