Constrictive criticism please.
Details:
My printer is out of toner
I tried to fill it
But it made my hands black
Ruined my favorite shirt
Now I have to change
It was my favorite shirt
2007-10-23 06:50:19 · 22 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I can totally relate. It has happened to me before, I just wasn't able to say it so eloquently. Great job
2007-10-23 11:44:09 · answer #1 · answered by going postal 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
If Chuck Norris were there he would have stared the printer down until it changed it's own toner. He also would have stared at the stains on your shirt and dared them not to remove themselves.
Man, too bad Chuck Norris wasn't there!
Oh, the poem's good too.
2007-10-23 12:34:47 · answer #2 · answered by Jess 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like the subtle allegory; casting off an old shell, searching for a new identity, a cathartic release.......very William Carlos Williams~
2007-10-23 07:39:47 · answer #3 · answered by Phil McKracken 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ahhh, I get it allegory. You feel guilty about masturbating and now you need to symbolically cleanse the sin from your body by washing your clothes.
Right???
2007-10-23 08:49:54 · answer #4 · answered by Mikey 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very margaret-atwood-esque! hehe! love the symbolism with the black hands and the feelings associated with them - the loss of a favourite shirt is something too few writers tackle... haha! still laughing! seriously, though, i like the way it flows... nice pace.
2007-10-23 06:59:05 · answer #5 · answered by shriekingvioletta 3 · 2⤊ 1⤋
I like your poem very much
I don't like others as such
It is always a joy
Like a new toy
2007-10-23 07:00:17 · answer #6 · answered by Emperor Insania Says Bye! 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You should try for a haiku.
Toner is all out.
Favorite shirt is ruined
Let me go home now.
The boss has to appreciate that.
2007-10-23 06:59:31 · answer #7 · answered by Southpaw 7 · 8⤊ 0⤋
Your reaches me on a deep and profound level.
*single glistening tear*
2007-10-23 07:22:50 · answer #8 · answered by I am the Badger Princess. 4 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Sooo...post modern and minimalist!
2007-10-23 06:58:01 · answer #9 · answered by average person Violated 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I applaud the social message you are spreading!
2007-10-23 07:02:28 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 1⤋