I wake up in the mourning , the first thing come to my mind is you baby, just think how you doing now at this moment , if you are happy or sad , I just want to know , if you think of me the same as I do, Every moment you spend with , i feel im the king in the world, just saddest my heart when you how to leave, I just wish the next day happen it again , and again. I know everything we want it rarely come true , I hope had i genie i just wish , if you feel the same you come to me now , if not it never met to me , I will be heart break, but i think good memories , that is enought at least , but the most I love is our friendship , that why i think we met to be , it not my mind talking now, it 's my heart is shaking for you. just to close , i wish to kiss u now, but we are friend , i respect what that mean, you know how i feel , but just waiting u respond to me.
2007-10-22 06:27:06 · 12 answers · asked by Friend from heart 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
You need to be at least SEMI-literate to write a song. Go back to school and study English and creative writing. That would be a good start. Then when you write try to make a little bit of sense....
2007-10-22 06:32:24 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Question What do you think of this song, written by me, in the blue?
I wake up in the morning , the first thing come to my mind is you baby, just think how you doing now at this moment , if you are happy or sad , I just want to know , if you think of me the same as I do, Every moment you spend with , i feel I'm the king in the world, just saddest my heart when you how to leave, I just wish the next day happen it again , and again. I know everything we want it rarely come true , I hope had i genie i just wish , if you feel the same you come to me now , if not it never met to me , I will be heart break, but i think good memories , that is enough at least , but the most I love is our friendship , that why i think we met to be , it not my mind talking now, it 's my heart is shaking for you. just to close , i wish to kiss u now, but we are friend , i respect what that mean, you know how i feel , but just waiting u respond to me.
there I corrected your spelling
2007-10-22 13:30:49 · answer #2 · answered by i_am_3030150 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think you have potential but definately need to proof read before submitting anything.Most striking is the sincere emotion between love and longing.Keep at it!
2007-10-22 13:31:45 · answer #3 · answered by sanemarie 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry friend, I'd have to hear you sing it to be certain.
The words don't seem to flow quite right yet, it just needs a little polish.
Good luck
2007-10-22 13:31:49 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like good lyrics!
2007-10-22 13:30:17 · answer #5 · answered by kelbean 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think the lyrics is good but, to be honest, you need to work on your grammar. goodluck!
2007-10-22 13:34:48 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
not bad, you have a future in song writing.
2007-10-22 16:19:43 · answer #7 · answered by Reeze 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
ay yo.thats really tight mah niqqa.
2007-10-22 13:32:04 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Don't leave your day job.
2007-10-22 13:31:48 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was totally cool
2007-10-22 13:33:47 · answer #10 · answered by Mom of 2 w/ PCOS 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋