What do you think of my newest poem?

Question

It's something I wrote in the middle of the night (between midnight and 1 am) because I couldn't get to sleep. I dunno how I came up with the topic, but it's an interesting take on things, I think. Let me know what you think.
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If death could only speak aloud
in his voice what tone?
A wail, a scream of agony
Or an unearthly moan?

Thoughts of death, more oft than not
is just a thing of nightmares
with stealth and a cruel whisper
to catch you unawares

Or perhaps his horrid voice
is cold and hard and strong
to keep you awake and dreading death
at his taunts all night long

Or it may be that Death's cruel voice
like fire, full of hate
taking life and draining hope
all good, obliterate

Yet has it not occurred to you
Death is not, in fact, a pest
His voice instead a calming murmur
"Quiet now, you need your rest..."

I normally do write happy poems, actually. But occasionally I'll think of other interesting topics to write about- so why not one of the most controversial topics of all, death? Believe me, very few of my poems have anything to do with death.

Answer 1

That's a great poem. You have lots of adjectives and different words that mean the same thing to add texture to it. I think it rocks! I'm a writer, and that's something I could never come up with!

Answer 2

Don't try so hard to rhyme... it's really a good topic and it's pretty well written, but there are places that don't make sense because of the forced rhyme.

and by the way, unaware(s) is not a word.

Answer 3

sounds like a profesional (spelled wrong) if you ask me but why are you thinking about death thats a downer why not write happy poems im sure they would be good as well

Answer 4

Well, you clearly have talent. However, next time, pick a happier topic.

Answer 5

that is an excellent poem. LOVE it.

Answer 6

depressing