I starting to get into poetry again but this time I am writing whatever comes to mind, I'd appreciate it if you would grade it.
A, B, C, D or F?!
Here is my poem: http://blog.360.yahoo.com/blog-iGWhA1YydKl5QpRh_8tB.xfX;_ylt=ApKsH2mYc1ljFbKQ5VEFlL20AOJ3
2007-10-21 05:25:30 · 10 answers · asked by Sabine 6 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Primo J: thanks for your honesty:)
2007-10-21 05:33:15 · update #1
thanks for your input, it really means a lot to me and it will teach me to become better at it, however I have never in my life done any drugs so the word "ectacsy" is just a figure of speech, also I am improving my English as I write along. Any pointers? Thanks guys! [English is not my native tongue]
2007-10-21 05:43:26 · update #2
English isn't my native language either, I found your poem, well quite intoxicating :o) and I would rate it a "C", because I want you to improve your poetry and I know you can.
For someone writing poetry in a foreign language its exceptionally good. I hope you don't find my English horrible. :o) Keep up the good work, looking forward to read more of your poetry pretty soon.
Take Care and God Bless you.
2007-10-21 17:33:47 · answer #1 · answered by Soul Doctor 7 · 5⤊ 0⤋
A few things:
Instead of "on ecstacy, why not ecstatic?
While "Ardent" can mean "burning", it is much more commonly used to imply zeal. Some writers, such as Nabokov use words in less familiar or unconventional ways but they've taken a great deal of time to perfect that craft. Just starting out, you might think about using words in their more conventional forms.
"Ardent Spirits" might be a good fit somewhere in here, as the phrase means "strong liquors", something distilled.
I'm not going to give a grade, but maybe just leave it at "not yet completed".
It would also be easier to read without "Open Arms" in the background. I had to turn off the audio to read the poem. Poetry is best read without distraction: let the words set the mood rather than background music.
--Dee
2007-10-21 17:58:01 · answer #2 · answered by Deirdre H 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I'd give it a B+; an A if it didn't have the " feel like I'm on ecstasy" line in it.
Ecstasy is a REAL experience that does NOT have to be drug induced.
p.s. nice cover photo over there @ 360
2007-10-21 05:33:50 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
i've got not got a precise to grade anybody. i don't be attentive to sufficient approximately poetry to take action. yet i visit remark regardless of the undeniable fact that. a good poem yet no longer considered one of your superb. the concern remember grew to become right into a splash too user-friendly for me.
2016-10-07 08:16:15 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hm...
Word choice, pretty nice words, I just dont find that ur poem flows well... C
2007-10-21 05:34:41 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
C+ that was prett good=D not the best
2007-10-21 05:35:47 · answer #6 · answered by Haris 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
reads more like song lyrics
2007-10-21 05:34:05 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
C-♥
2007-10-21 05:52:40 · answer #8 · answered by Melly 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
F
2007-10-21 05:33:30 · answer #9 · answered by Husker41 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
D....
2007-10-21 05:40:34 · answer #10 · answered by You Are My Wings So I Can Fly 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋