So bottombs up
My wayward friend
Light the fire
Put out the water
Down we go
But up we rise
Higher than the clouds
In the bright blue sky
Or the silver jets
Where all dreams fly
And angels frett
Of earning their wings
But pay no attention
In trying to bring
Others up, so far above
So down we plunge
In this endless fit of love
Love of addiction,
Or addiction of love
Bring me up darling, on the back of a dove
Won’t someone please save me
From this deathly affliction
2007-10-20 20:39:23 · 7 answers · asked by elemenopee. 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
poems are like a snapshot - just using words instead of a camera and film
ok, you have a good start, but now work on it. what does addiction look like - what mental pictures do you come up with - what vision can you pass to your reader??
2007-10-21 18:37:12 · answer #1 · answered by art_flood 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What is supposed to be the literary significance of your work? What have you contributed to the art of poetry?Is this supposed to affect anyone? What have you done right?
By the way, I am just being an asshole.
2007-10-20 20:44:48 · answer #2 · answered by Ben Has Questions 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
So romantic! I like this phrase - "Where all dreams fly."
2007-10-20 21:02:08 · answer #3 · answered by Tia 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very interesting...
and romantic
2007-10-20 20:42:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
hippie love with a tempo
2007-10-20 21:59:49 · answer #5 · answered by yourguy22 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmm....I like it. Great job. I like how you said "put out the water."
2007-10-21 08:48:53 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
brilliant!
2007-10-20 23:34:47 · answer #7 · answered by elaine.patton 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋