ask me tell you
thank me thank you
question 1 question 2
start here , continue.
don’t stay on zero.
work hard , earn more
in success you can sure
yahoo page is the cure
for friend open door
to the envier don’t care
tell him who wait
ask him birth date
five days , five year
fifty over my dear
my home your home
same bed , same room
2007-10-20 20:16:01 · 4 answers · asked by Abuadnan 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
It is the first trying to write poems by english language
2007-10-20 22:01:01 · update #1
For you, Abuadnan, that the english language is not your vernacular, the above poem is good, I think. I found some very symphonic sentences on it.
Good luck
2007-10-21 22:09:22 · answer #1 · answered by shakeeb 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah its hard to tell what the exact point of this poem is imo but I wouldnt say its bad but it does seem like some of the words are forced at places.
2007-10-20 21:08:43 · answer #2 · answered by magpiesmn 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Catchy, 9/10. I realized that you need to read in half cause its really 2 lines in each line. But... is there a main idea for this poem O-o...
2007-10-20 20:24:25 · answer #3 · answered by Steven 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The meter wanders all over the place, and it doesn't seem to have much point to it.
Doug
2007-10-20 20:26:14 · answer #4 · answered by doug_donaghue 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋