"Towards the end of the story, Chief’s emotions change. He feels alone and angry so he lashes out on the Comanches on the bus ride and kills the Laughing Man off the story. "
Especially the second sentence. It sounds awkward and i need to rephrase it but i cant seem to think of anything, please help.
PS- actually i think the first sentence might be ok, unless you can find something better.
2007-10-20 04:52:06 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
well you could say
Chief's emotions change by the end of the story. Feeling alone and angry, he lashes out on the Comanches on the bus ride, killing the Laughing Man.
2007-10-20 05:03:14 · answer #1 · answered by Nana Callie loves to sing 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Towards the end of the story, Chief’s emotions change. He feels alone and angry so he lashes out at the Comanches on the bus ride and kills off the Laughing Man.
2007-10-20 11:57:22 · answer #2 · answered by quatt47 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Towards the end of the story, Chief’s emotions change. He feels alone and angry and, during the bus ride, he lashes out AT the Comanches and kills the Laughing Man."
2007-10-20 11:59:41 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It should be 'lashes out AT'. The 'Laughing Man' bit is confusing because I don't know the context of the situation. if 'Laughing Man' is a character in a story that 'Chief' is telling, then it should be 'kills Laughing Man off IN the story', but if 'Chief' and 'Laughing Man' are both characters in a story told by someone else, it should simply be 'and kills the Laughing Man'.
2007-10-20 12:01:39 · answer #4 · answered by curtisports2 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋