As the fires burned in my heart like a passionate flame that would not die, I realized that it was true love.
2007-10-20 04:50:24 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Thanks to "Queen of England." Was just what I was looking for.
2007-10-20 08:41:54 · update #1
it is a run-on sentence.
Here is a way to change it:
The fires burned in my heart like a passionate flame that would not die. At this instant I realized that it was true love.
2007-10-20 04:59:50 · answer #1 · answered by Glitter 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's redundant to compare a fire to a flame. The sentence is also burdened by a clumsy rhythm. A possible rewrite:
The deathless fire of passion burned in my heart: I knew it was true love.
2007-10-20 14:11:40 · answer #2 · answered by Dear Carlos 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Like undying flames of passion burning in my heart, I realized it was true love.
2007-10-20 12:09:28 · answer #3 · answered by Ink Corporate 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not an english major or anything but im thinking its that either 'fires' should be singular or 'a passionate flame' should be plural...
but i could be wrong
2007-10-20 11:58:45 · answer #4 · answered by Daniel J 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Never seen several fires with only one flame. lol
2007-10-20 11:59:16 · answer #5 · answered by walyank 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a run out sentence.
2007-10-20 11:56:22 · answer #6 · answered by Cool Dogg Ringer 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a run-on sentence
2007-10-20 11:54:04 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Run on
2007-10-20 12:19:15 · answer #8 · answered by Sweet Brown Sugar 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋