A poem I wrote in 2005?

Question

Tears are so friendly
when I cry them for you
when you are sad and hurting
I am hurting too
your love is so pure
you do not see my flaws
my child you are special
I am forever yours
the sun will shine forever
on your lovely face
and roses will know envy
on sight of your grace
I will be there always
to love and to pray
that happiness will find you
and bless you today
my sweet little angel
I give this gift to you
my eternal love and gratitude
for just being you


Ok say it's not the greatest but I guess we all have poetry that we would like to improve so this is one of them, suggestions?

Answer 1

Don't change a thing you are very talented! love it as much as I loved your other poem.You should be proud of how well you can express your emotions through poetry. Has anyone ever told you you should write a book of poetry? I m sure they must have, but if not I'm telling You now I think you would do well!!!

Answer 2

nicely i think of it relatively is sweet to jot down poetry it shall we your strategies loose extraordinarily if your upset and by making use of the appearance of it you have relatively good skills, you won't be able to stop at quite a few poems you have wrote by way of fact nicely it relatively is like combating the quantity of cases you pay attention to a music you won't be able to help it.

Answer 3

how sweet. The genuine deep love you feel expressed here is coming through. don't change anything. it's wonderful.

Answer 4

I like it. I don't think it needs too much improvement.

Answer 5

Actually gf, I think it is very good like it is. keep it.

Answer 6

i like it

Answer 7

That was so good =P ♥