poem i wrote. please tell me if you like it.?

Question

Let me steal you from the one you love
In hopes that as time passes you'll love me.
So deeply does your smile my heart move
That merely touching you is ecstasy.
Normally, such crimes are not my style,
Nor would I infidelity propose;
But I love you so much I can't revile
Anything that some slight hope bestows.
Let me show you how I'll care for you,
How good it feels to have me at your side,
How spring eternal I'll make ever new,
And every want or passing whim provide.
Try me out. I promise you'll be mine
Once you see how bright my sun can shine.

Answer 1

Very Inspiring poem. Keep it up. A star for you.:)

I liked these sentences very much :

So deeply does your smile my heart move
Let me show you how I'll care for you,
Try me out. I promise you'll be mine
Once you see how bright my sun can shine.

Really nice:) . I think you wrote for your loved ones!=))

Have a great day:)

Answer 2

This poem is terrific. The words used, the way you phrase them the rythym, rhyme, all goes so well. And I like 'cause I have been there, tho I was the who was taken but loved another and knew he loved me. We had a great year together, till he dumped me. So yep I can relate!

Answer 3

It's a wonderful poem, wonderful promise, wishes and hopes. But also painful because of the impossible love.
Take care.

Answer 4

This is a great poem. Every poem that you write I just have to read them. You are a poet in the heart.

Answer 5

Very Good, but you can't take my man..
(I don't have one at the moment) hehe.
I really like the rhythm and the rhyme. Totally wonderful.

Answer 6

that is beautiful bravo! :) i like it! this person seems very special...