I wrote this song in 15 mins when i was pissed at my friends so here goes :
The value of this friendship means nothing to me
No friend can stand to see this eyes of dispare
No avenge seeking desire
But your sympathy is growing cold
Losing the way i think inside
The anger and longing to be free
Lukes beneathe me within this cold summer
Will you mind coming over
Knowing my disgrace
Won't you mind coming over
I'm wasted without this face
2007-10-18 01:05:15 · 3 answers · asked by NAI 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Lyrics
Sadly, there's no meter except the chorus; and the way the disjointed thoughts don't seem to be heading towards one point I would guess this is just a good vent and not a piece of the next Rage Against The Machine single.
Keep writing.
2007-10-18 01:08:49 · answer #1 · answered by Your Uncle Dodge! 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think thats fantastic, you could make it rhyme a little bit more, but depending what style of music you think it is you don't really need to rhyme. and by "lukes" do you mean "lurks"? great lyrics man
2007-10-18 08:09:33 · answer #2 · answered by casey 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
it is stolen from MAGNA FI
2007-10-22 07:30:05 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋