Okay so what do you think of this poem? It's got a little mystery I guess, titled Teacup?

Question

The companionship of my tea-cup
Her social embrace
The sadness of her bitter cold dregs
Discarded with yesterdays despair
The warmth forgotten long ago
Her comfort now just a memory
Once she held my secrets
Listened to downtrodden ramblings
Shared with me my hopes and dreams
Warmed frostbitten fingertips
On frigid winter days
And now she lays dismembered
Shattered on the floor
Like busted dreams and scattered hopes
My secrets she hears no more


I say 'her' to make the teacup more human, to go with the flow of the poem, and personilise it for the reader.

It is open for interpretation or maybe you just don't want to think Nathan, but it says exactly what it means, I don't know how you don't get it honestly. It's pretty straightforward, about the impression we leave on things and who they would be to us had they been human. It's full of hidden meaning designed that way so the reader can decide what it might mean to them, rather than me just painting a pretty picture for you all. Sorry, but I thought it was obvious, and usually I take criticsm well, but u are the first person to have that reaction. I like that it is so different and perhaps a little confusing. Like I said open to ur own interpretation

I do realise however that it does feel a little imcomplete, but I have not yet edited and redrafted, wanted a few opinions first

Answer 1

Flawless i like the structure of the poem and its description. Everybody has that one cup that they drink from in which they are attached to. Good Job .!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 2

Not only is the teacup your friend and confidant, but a virtual love affair. The shared moments between the two of you have been cherished beyond words, you are best friends, sharing everything, until the day, maybe today, maybe yesterday when that bond was shattered. It could be she was dropped, or for an unknown reason to the reader, thrown to the floor. The shattered pieces irreconcilable, and the pieces impossible to mend. A sad state of affairs to be sure, and an awesome poem. I don't recommend changing anything, but if you do be sure to post it again. The mystery is complete, don't tell all, let us use our own imaginations.

Answer 3

Just right, a bit strange perhaps, but original
to choose a teacup to personify. And all
the descriptions that follow are exactly
what befits the experience of a "teacup".

This is just what a poem should be, from
a teacup to great yet personal meanings

Answer 4

I don't get it.

I think I get what you're trying for, but it's not doing it.

You need to carefully choose your words, write your lines, and make sure what you are writing is what you actually intend for it to say.