Does this look good for my babysitting flyer?

Question

Babysitter Available!
When you can’t be home yourself, I’m the next best thing!

(picture)


Hi! My name is #()*()@*#*(&Q! and I am a mature and responsible 14 year old student who loves kids. I am very enthusiastic, punctual and reliable.
You won’t have to worry about a mess when you get home! I love playing board, video, any other games, playing sports, and watching movies as activities.

• Information for you to know:
• Trained with school Babysitting Classes
• Starting CPR classes very soon
• Have babysat kids from the age of 2-8 (Recommendations upon request)
• A lot of experience with cooking
• Casual or permanent!
• Day and/or night on weekends
• 3:30-10 PM on weekdays.
• Rate of pay is $7 an hour. $1 extra for more than 2 children
• You can reach me at @*(#!*(&#)& at any time between...
• 3:30-9:00 PM on weekdays
• 11:00 AM – 10:00 PM on weekends

Answer 1

[You won’t have to worry about a mess when you get home! I love playing board, video, any other games, playing sports, and watching movies as activities.]

1. Take this line out because parents are paying you to watch their kid and not playing video games or doing other stuff. Also they already expect you to keep the place tidy so you don't have to say that.

[Starting CPR classes very soon]

2. Take this line out because you haven't done it. Wanting to take the CPR class doesn't qualify you.

[Rate of pay is $7 an hour. $1 extra for more than 2 children]

3. You should charge $3 for each additional child. So if there are two then the hourly rate would be $10. ($1 extra is too little)

Otherwise it looks good.

Answer 2

First of all...i'm very impressed.

My feedback...
1-Take out the line "You wont have to worry...etc". Instead, put the word "responsible" before the word "enthusiastic". That should cover it.
2-Under your bullet points put this "Hobbies: Playing board games, sports, and children's games". Take out the "video games". Parents don't want to hear that.
3-Take out the CPR class bullet until you take the class, and then add it back in.
4-The bullet that says "Have babysat...etc.", just say "Experience babysitting ages 2-8" and that is excellent that you put "recommendations available on request"!

Frankly, I think you have alot of experienced and you even have training, so I think your pay rate is PERFECTLY OKEY and will be totally justified, especially when you get your CPR training under your belt. Any parent would be lucky to have you watch their kids.

One last thing***safety first*** don't go anywhere and don't make any arrangements without your parents approval.
You're an inspiration! Best wishes!

Answer 3

I teach babysitting and I tell my students that randomly handed out fliers are not a good idea in my mind. By doing this, you put your contact information in the hands of complete strangers- an especially dangerous thing for a young teen girl.

I also dislike fliers because getting too much business is almost as bad as not enough. You can only take on one job a night most of the time.

However, a modified version of this would be a great 'resume' to give to possible clients. Here is a link to a list of Red Cross forms and things that might help: http://www.redcross.org/services/hss/courses/babyindex.html

Answer 4

sounds good. you'll get some responses for sure :)