Can anyone help me anwser this short answer for my application?

Question

This is the question: What are the unique qualities of Northwestern University, and of the specific undergraduate school to which you are applying, that make you want to attend Northwestern? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?
Here is my response:
One of my goals in life is to apply, and be accepted into a well-established college or university. When I began my college search I wasn't really certain what I was looking for. It didn’t take long for me to realize that this was a huge decision in my life, to go to college. I was essentially selecting my home for the subsequent four years, and perhaps even more, because I want to go to medical school. Where I go could have an impact on numerous decisions of my life such as, but not limited to, the amount of job offers I would receive after I graduate, where I want to apply my medical profession. When I considered applying to Northwestern University, I felt that having that big city experience I would acquire from attending would help me expand my horizons, and accurately prepare me for anything. I valued the diversity the school offered as a way to discover not only about other cultures, but to appreciate how diverse the world is economically, racially, and religiously. Each of these diversities presents me the chance to learn from the experiences of others, a trait that unquestionably would help any career.

Answer 1

Not much of your answer is specific to Northwestern. Do some research into the school itself, name a few professors and northwestern alumni. Northwestern is so much more than a "well-established" college or university, it is one of the best schools in the country. Let them know that you understand how good it is and that you want to make it an even better school by your presence and future activities. Just be much more specific. Good luck, I'm sure you will be a fine doctor someday.

Answer 2

In my honest opinion, your response is weak, generic, and unorganized. There are many unnecessary statements that weaken your point, especially your opening statement. They are not asking you to state the obvious. This is the most important statement you make (the opening). It needs to be strong and set a tone for rest of your essay.

You could start it out by stating "My goal in life is to become a medical doctor who is well trained, versed not only in academic knowledge but also in areas such as economics, racial relations, and religeous affairs. To establish this goal, my search found the Northwestern University."

I hate to put words in your mouth, so I used the elements you mentioned in your original essay. I don't necessary agree putting race, religeon and economics is the best idea, but you see my point. (I hope)

If you add, "I believe, selection of a universtiy sets the tone for the next 8 years of my life. As the college being in one of the larger city in the United States offering diversity and culture (expand here a little more), I feel, the experience will give me the exposure I need to prepare myself as a seasoned professional for the rest of my adult life." I basically said everytyhing you said.

You will need to expand your ideas little more. I hope my starting statement will help you a little.

Answer 3

Cut out everything before "When I considered applying to . . ." and you will be fine. Add more secific things about Northwestern, too. You mentioned nothing about the major you wanted to take, and why Northwestern is a good place to study that major. For hints, go to the school's website. Every major should have a webpage that tells you about their program. Do they have special internship offers or something? Write about that.

Answer 4

You should be more specific to Northwest right from the beginning. Tell them how Northwest stuck out right away - it wasn't a search. And tell them why. Go to their homepage, read what the school brags about and throw some of that in too. Don't just rephrase what they write though, make it personal. Make it detailed. Don't make it seem like you are applying to multiple schools.