My first novel?

Question

A 7 year old girl watches her parents get killed by a vampire,witch and werewolf. Later on in her 20s she joins a group of assians to kill the people that killed her family. But realizes later on there is more to gain in life than revenge.

What do you think? does it sound good to you?

Answer 1

I think it sound very good can you e-mail it to me?


(my address is [e-mail] if you acctually want to send it to me.)

Answer 2

Since this is your first novel, I would recommend simplifying things a bit first. Relax and just concentrate on one thing at a time.

For example, why Vampire, Witch AND Werewolf? Why would these three even want to work together? They're usually mortal enemies, would be hard to explain.

Just pick one, describe how the parents were killed, then go from there.

Btw, to define it as a novel, that would be a minimum of 50,000 words, which isn't to bad, considering full adult novels are usually 100,000 to 125,000 words. Again take it easy, write one scene at a time and see where the story takes you :)

Answer 3

*sigh* No offense, but what exactly is the story? This sounds like about the last twenty story submissions I got from teenagers. What exactly is the plot? Woop-di-do. Yet another angst-filled little girl who grows up into a vampire killer. Been done. And the whole vampire, witch, and werewolf thing is just trite. Can you be a bit more original?

Answer 4

To me it sounds interesting. I know you got a few answers that say 'cliche', but you know what? I realize that it's ok to write familiar things and add your personal touch or new twists to the story. For the love of God! You're learning how to write!! It's excellent you've already started.

Just focus on the details. What makes this story different from the others? Commit to your story and you'll know the answer.

Answer 5

ok i think its WAY WAY too melodramatic. thats pretty hideous sounding to have some little kid watch that and it also sounds like it would be something that 100 other ppl have already written or thought of. it is too simple and it needs to have some kind of unexpected ironic twist in it. realizing theres more to life than revenge isnt interesting enough to make someone want to keep reading the book all the way thru. u have to make it so they dont wanna put the thing down bc its so interesting they have to know what happens next.

Answer 6

Vampires don't like werewolves.
Werewolves don't like vampires.
Witches don't like werewolves.
Witches don't like vampires.
Vampires don't like witches.
Werewolves don't like witches.
Asians? They are more likely to run away than help!

Why the hell would vampires, werewolves and witches fight together.

And what's this moral... She realizes later on, there is more to gain in life than revenge? If somebody killed YOUR family and YOU could seek revenged on them wouldn't YOU attempt to kill them (without Asians).

A little ready-made to me, thanks but looks like you need to go back to grammar school.

Answer 7

That sounds like the most cliched novel I have ever heard. vampires, witches AND werewolves? You left out Satan himself. Nope, nothing I would read. Sounds like a joke to me.
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They're, Their, There - Three Different Words.

Careful or you may wind up in my next novel.

Pax - C

Answer 8

It sounds like you are off to a good start. Have you considered a Writers' Group such as are on Meetup.com? I belong to several.

Answer 9

Write it, if that is your favored genre. The first novel is yet a stepping stone to improved writing and skills--to include circumstance of background and characters.

Answer 10

It sounds interesting. Fantasy and realistic fiction combined. I love the fantasy setting, and fantasy characters.
I'd read your novel.

Answer 11

It sounds pretty interesting....did you ever read Anne Rice..good luck I hope its a success!