sunset's rain
Before I fall like a withered leaf,
My life colored with pain.
Far away from sunrise,
Fast approaching sunset's rain.
Tears they feed my sorrow,
A memory I cannot claim.
Different times in different ways,
Slow, but not yet dead,
What have I left to leave,
Making gold from lead,
I come and go, arrived and left,
Not a single word was said.
Shadows appear in my dreams,
In a race that no one wins.
The hands of time never rest,
Time to pay for all my sins.
Join me in eternal sleep,
The flames will burn and cleanse.
2007-10-16 10:42:11 · 10 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Your poems just keep getting better and better every time i see one..Whatever you do to keep all these beautiful words flowing out on paper is really amazing as your writings are amazing,,well done.....Shelly
2007-10-16 14:47:54 · answer #1 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brilliant poem. I can tell that you feel very cryptic, and such a mood, I've found, is perfect for writing poetry, ad you've shown here.
It gave me an odd feeling, reading it. I can't say what, though. A mix of several, perhaps? Cryptic, indeed.
2007-10-16 11:27:12 · answer #2 · answered by Tricia 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Personally The only flames I want in eternal sleep are the ones that make ash out of this hollow shell I call me. Well done.
2007-10-16 11:08:15 · answer #3 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
especially good temper for Monday till somebody purely asked me a question and that they did no longer like my very user-friendly answer. Do you have a USB device with over a gig of reminiscence? No. All I even have is those. it relatively is not my activity to have those. that's the 1st time somebody asked me. He could be asking somebody else who orders place of work aspects. he's lazy. He is conscious.
2016-12-18 09:20:04 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have many good visual images. I do not find it cryptic, I can understand what you are saying and feeling. You have successfully communicated. It's a very good poem. I especially like 'sunset's rain'.
2007-10-16 14:00:34 · answer #5 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!! Is pretty weird the feeling you're having, but when it comes to write poetry, you don't loose that touch. Very nice indeed.
Your angel, love you
Marilyn
2007-10-16 10:57:31 · answer #6 · answered by . 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The imagery in this poem is amazing.
I wish I could write like you.
2007-10-16 11:41:55 · answer #7 · answered by behind_infinity0123 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Apparently this mood is good for your writing...Excellent job.
2007-10-16 11:01:55 · answer #8 · answered by frozenfreebird9 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
cryptic, but also very beautiful
2007-10-16 21:26:47 · answer #9 · answered by Analyst 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how do you write like that? its so powerful...
2007-10-16 13:30:49 · answer #10 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋