Walking October
I guess i've pulled the trigger now
I went in far too deep
I crossed the line in agaony
Through skin my blood will seep
These shadows shift on walls and floor
You're dressed in black and gray
I've lost myself inside your eyes
Forgetten what to say
Clinging on to what we had
Until you board the train
Now i muse this oath i took
These hands that feel such pain
How is it we've switched our course
When it was set in stone?
How am i to move on now
Without you, all alone?
What a risk i'm taking now
As bend turns into break
What a fate i'm testing now
With my whole life at stake
Dare i cross the line again
With hell that came before?
I can't help love a tragedy
I just want this once more
Here's a chance to run again
To shatter You & I
Go on, say my name again
And look me in the eye.
By: k.M.P. ("Cut Up Angel")
2007-10-16 10:02:47 · 5 answers · asked by Mary 4 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
I really hate to say it's bad, doesn't flow, has no rhythm, no continuity or any redeeming features. So I won't, it's really good. Bet I got you on that one lol. Keep it up.
2007-10-16 11:04:11 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i follow all of your poems, read them all, over and over. i also read the comments and everything. not a fan of poetry, but sorta like this one. theres not really a clear point to this one, or at least i couldn't find one. and what does the title "walking october" have to do with anything? you can and have done better.
- a fan
2007-10-16 19:53:34 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can't say anything bad cuz it good.
2007-10-16 17:12:25 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
. . . ****. that is amazing. WHY DO PEOPLE HAVE TO HAVE SUCH GOOD WRITTING SKILLS? grr. i suck at writting.
but seriously, its really good.
2007-10-16 19:20:53 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. ^__^
You got skill. :D
2007-10-17 08:09:44 · answer #5 · answered by Melissa 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋