Let Go
It's more than coincidence
The pattern on this sheet
His heartbeat makes the rhythm
And his footsteps make the beat
The numbers match the timing
And my limbs are tied in place
The cracks that line the ceiling
Form the image of his face
It seems that every nightfall
He appears in front of me
He haunts me while i'm sleeping
And he will not let me free
I want to start this over
To unlock him from my heart
It's time to make my come back
I am ready now to start
By: K.M.P. ("Cut Up Angel")
2007-10-16 09:50:04 · 9 answers · asked by Mary 4 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
pretty good, I like the rhythm of it
2007-10-16 09:53:08 · answer #1 · answered by bregweidd 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very Good, it reads and sings nicely. It flows, and it tells us something from beginning to end. It has continuity, and rhythm. Keep up the good work.
2007-10-16 10:57:15 · answer #2 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
O.M.G.
That's really good,It must have taken you 4-ever too write.
It's really thought through
2007-10-16 09:54:12 · answer #3 · answered by Kailee S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW!!!
:)))))))))))))))))
it's reallly good.
I loooovedd it when i got to the second verse.
it's so meaningful and it describes exactly how i feel rite now.
it's great.
keep writing!
:D
2007-10-16 11:30:55 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This sounds like a song to me...do you play an instrument? x
2007-10-17 03:01:04 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice I like.
2007-10-16 10:09:57 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think ur poem is great.
its honest.... true, romantic in a realistic sense....its expressing what u feel/want to feel in a way that makes you appear in it.
keep writing! keep rhyming!
2007-10-16 10:03:37 · answer #7 · answered by ray_phoenix_ash 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
fab!! you really wrote that yourself? i am not usually a fan of poetry as i often find it complicated but this one is very clear. its great x
2007-10-16 09:53:57 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its a very beautiful poem that i full of feeling and thoughts
2007-10-16 09:53:17 · answer #9 · answered by magiclady2007 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty decent. Well written.
2007-10-16 09:59:35 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋