Would any native speakers help me with this? Are there correct in English (part5)?

Question

Are they correct in English? If they are not correct, how can I correct them? I cut my article to sevral parts cuz i want ppl reading them carefully, so this sutff is very important to me, please help me! Thanks for reading this!

"This inscription in front of you is written by comrade Zhu De. The display building is behind us, the previously mentioned information is included in it. Several decades have passed by, but time can not wipe out the hero’s history and the green pines will be accompanied by the struggling spirit. General Yang Jingyu has not vanished, his heroic deeds encourage us to defend the homeland, and enhance the strong will of building a modern and powerful socialist country!"

I know that most of ppl don't like this kinda article, include me! Who likes?

I will appreciate if any one help me; I've ingnored somebody coming here for earning points without any helping, but U(who know said who!) Maybe u r enjoy laughing at others, but I have to explain to you: I did not quote any rubbish. If i wanna do that, I will quote profile like "Unlucky in most things, but only have a little p*ssy's needs.
Tried to climb a gruesome house where a monster lived, but was very high, so me bottled it! " Oh sorry, I did not noticed that's your profile.

Answer 1

I will try to make as much sense as i can of your text as if i were a travel guide . the green pines make no sense in our language so i have left them out.
( The inscription you see before you written by comrade Zhu De , and now housed in the building behind us , Tells of the great hero General Yang Jingyu who,s spirit is is still with us . Many decades have passed since his death , but his heroic deeds encourage us to defend the homeland , and enhance a determination to build a modern and powerful socialist country )

Answer 2

I would amend it like this:
"This inscription is written by comrade Zhu De (please indicate to the reader what the inscription is about - is it about General Yang Jingyu's heroic deeds?). The previously mentioned information is included in a display in the building behind us. Several decades have passed by, but time cannot wipe out the historic deeds of the hero. " The next sentence, "And the green pines will be accompanied by the struggling spirit," is very difficult English. It sounds like poetry, but it might be an idiom. Or is it a proverb? If it is a proverb, please state that it is and then explain what it means in English - proverbs often don't translate well. "The legacy of General Yang Jingyu (I assume the general is dead) has not vanished. His heroic deeds encourage us to defend the homeland and to make greater efforts to build a modern and powerful socialist country."

What is the display building? Is it a museum or an exhibition hall? Unless the "previously mentioned information" was included in an earlier part of the same text, don't mention it, as it is confusing. I hope this helps.

Answer 3

Are there correct in English (part5)?

This seems grammatically incorrect to me. Shouldn't it be, 'Is the English language correct in the following:' or are they correct.

I cannot tell you whether the history is accurate or not.

Answer 4

This piece seems perfect English to me.Maybe there shouldn't be an exclamation mark at the end.

Answer 5

You obviously didn't write it. Hope you're not thinking of plagiarising it and passing it off as your own... the quoted piece is correct.

Answer 6

No. Grossly incorrect!
But why would you want to quote this rubbish anyway! Are you pushing Soviet Weekly or something?

Answer 7

This question (and your others) should be in the education section, not in history.

Answer 8

YOU DON'T NEED THE COMMA AFTER BY AND AFTER HOMELAND

Answer 9

what?