I called this 'The Last Sunny Day' but it's really about my Sunday morning run.....
Its the time of year when the hills burn and everyone smokes,
Green alder fires coaxed to life with cans of flaming diesel.
More hope than heat.
I climb a hill with an inscrutable Irish name,
The sky scattered with giant molar clouds
Grinding up the blue.
As the road levels I slow and turn and see your face,
Showing me the other side of things, back lit.
The world is new.
2007-10-15 12:47:59 · 12 answers · asked by Duncan w ™ ® 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Abby, only metaphorical smoke, The burning hills are red leaves and the reason everyone smokes is that the air is cold and you can see your breath. That's why the smoke represents "more hope than heat".
2007-10-15 12:53:28 · update #1
Green alder contains a lot of water so the smoke is largely steam.
2007-10-15 12:55:16 · update #2
The Irish name is Auchinachie which sounds like Oh-han-icky
2007-10-15 12:56:57 · update #3
You are too good at this stuff, fecker!
molar clouds, (mmmm deep).
Grinding up the blue, (all that exercise makes you high doesn't it?)
2007-10-15 13:16:02 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think you are tripping when you exercise like I said before I got suspended, well I'm back shaky!
Molar clouds should be added to the cloud formations list.
Like loose change said.
2007-10-16 07:43:08 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't get it, 'n I don't like it... It seems like your trying too, with all the big words 'n whatnot. And it's kind of hard to get a good picture and/or, understand what's going on or what your talking about or even what your trying to say.
I would elaborate more, but your trying to do that a bit too much already I feel... Perhaps focus on telling your story a bit more than to sound poetic. Because sometimes when you do that, the words will come to you with no effort 'n you'll sound brilliantly poetic. (Or at least fairly poetic...)
Luck to you.
2007-10-15 15:33:30 · answer #3 · answered by Twili 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Beautiful!
2007-10-15 13:54:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I like it but the smoke line threw me off too.
2007-10-15 17:16:53 · answer #5 · answered by Bill 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It is amazing and I like it, thanks for sharing. You can never go wrong when you are inspired and write from the heart. No worries, brother.
2007-10-15 21:24:51 · answer #6 · answered by LadyLeatherneck 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very different from the usual things on here, well done.
2007-10-15 14:39:10 · answer #7 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Beautiful! Reminds me of why autumn is my favorite season. Keep it up! =]
2007-10-15 12:56:49 · answer #8 · answered by 234567877543224578 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Great! i can almost smell the smoke
2007-10-15 12:51:25 · answer #9 · answered by Abby 2 · 0⤊ 3⤋
It 's quite good as it is
2007-10-16 00:28:13 · answer #10 · answered by chrisvoulg1 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋