I need this line lowered to five syllables... The cold breze reminds me of you.
2007-10-15 07:44:16 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
I can get it down to this:
"To you the breeze alludes"
There is no one-syallable way to say "reminds" so, you're going to have to get rid of the "to" or "the" in some way or another...If you are going for Iambic pentameter here, many poets do in fact deviate from that structure in one or two lines to put empasis on those lines...
Good luck!
2007-10-15 07:58:27 · answer #1 · answered by mittu90 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Cold breeze comes like you.
2007-10-15 07:54:56 · answer #2 · answered by smallbizperson 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Duplicate question gets my duplicate answer...
You are the cold breeze.
(the metaphor is much more powerful and direct, I think)
2007-10-15 07:58:15 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
You're like a cold breeze.
A cold breeze--like you...
2007-10-15 07:57:56 · answer #4 · answered by Miss Perception 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋