Your smile and face was so beautiful
Your heart was so cold
I thought you made me happy
With the lies you told
Are you ever going to get out of my head?
Maybe with time
Your love should come with a caution tag
Your love is such a crime
It feels like you left me so long ago
the months seems like years
I’m so sick of this heartache
I’m so sick of drowning in these tears
I pray often to God to bring me death in this life
I know if you ever heard me say that you would smile
God I cant believe I married you
I can’t believe you were my wife.
I have had so many sleepless nights
And all the tears I have cried
I bet you haven’t she one tear for me
Because first you have to have a heart inside
I have never so much
LOVED and HATED
I hate to look at myself sometimes
Because I hate to see what you have created
Sometimes I feel so sorry for you
And all the guys after me
Sometimes I feel like putting a bullet in both out heads
To end the misery
2007-10-14 14:43:33 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
It is very moving
2007-10-14 14:54:30 · answer #1 · answered by Experto Credo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Was this a first hand ordeal, or what prompted you to write this particular poem? I write this is why I ask.......It sounds to me like you carry a heavy heart. I feel truth in it, I feel hurt in it, I sense the need to let go and the struggle therein. I realize quite well the very things that draw you to someone also drive you away. It is amazing the total grief from that once bringing such happiness and desire.....Personally I like it! And if it is a personal thing....may you rise above the situation to soar to greater heights reaching more than your fondest expectations!
2007-10-14 14:50:49 · answer #2 · answered by Sage 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'd say you've gotten into a more serious situation with a person you thought you could change by being with only to find out you've fallen deeply in love with her and not only that but she's kept the bad traits you once thought you could change and she's turned you into the asshole she used to complain about.
I went through the same thing, but on a less serious level, nevertheless, i was deeply in love and it wasn't even funny i almost got run over while thinking of it hard and walking down the road. We relate in a way
2007-10-14 14:54:26 · answer #3 · answered by Hassoun 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its a very nicely written poem, but I can sense a lot of pain through your words. I know I write myself and sometimes it really is a good way to vent what it in your heart and mind!
2007-10-14 14:50:33 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Honestly I kind of like it. It is really deep and I can tell that you really loved her.
time will heal your sorrow.
P.S.
don't buy a gun any time soon.
2007-10-14 14:53:00 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think you need to put a cd player in your car, or listen to the radio.
2007-10-14 14:47:32 · answer #6 · answered by steve.c_50 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
She really hurt you, didn't she? As a writer. let me tell you its a very good poem but you have to rework it so the meter (rhythm) is better.
2007-10-14 14:51:48 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Honest. Now take it down before somebody copies it and uses it for profit at your expense.
2007-10-14 14:48:28 · answer #8 · answered by Max 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
It was pretty good up until the last 8 lines.
2007-10-14 14:48:32 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
If this is based on real life, you have a few issues.
2007-10-14 14:52:59 · answer #10 · answered by ♥sick n tired♥ 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋