when it comes to love, its never to late?

Question

Have you ever thought about memories and wanted to cry.

Because you realized that you allowed the love to die

Reminiscing on the times you stared into his eye

And said "baby I will never leave you" which is now considered a lie

You is wondering what it could of, would have been

Wishing you can go way back when

Yall ……..were ……………..inlove

Spending so much time together, feelings grew strong

Knowing that you would never spend another day alone

Your heart had a abominable melody while it was crying out painful moans

You staring out the window, trying to not pick up the phone

Truth is you want to call him and make everything good

Its getting harder every min so you was thinking that you should

Time seems to be running out, you have to make a decision

You having all different sorts, of all inner visions

From dinner in the kitchen, and in the bed kissing

So many memories comes to mind, but time is ticking

Time is ticking, time is ticking, this could be the end

Cause once that clock hit ten, he can only be your friend

Don't sometimes you wish u can go back in time

But life is not a movie so u cant press rewind

Its not that you made a mistake, but it hurts

To see the blooming flower fall down to the dirt

When you turn around you see his shadow right at you

You whisper "I love you" he says "back at you"

He turns around, you saying no baby no

Time is running, and u saying baby don't go

5 seconds left, time is ticking, time is ticking

you run and say baby don't go, don't go

But for a min u think its to late, just to find out the clock just broke

(time stops)

Those were the visions that led you to believe

That its never to late to get back what you need

If you confused, I just want you to relate

That when it comes to love, ITS NEVER TO LATE



its never to late, to get your love back. make it happen.

Answer 1

If you studied poetry (and English), I think you would be good at poetry.

Answer 2

In the 5th line it should be either, "You are wondering", or "you were wondering", not "you is wondering. In line 15 it should be "you're" not "you". In the 3rd line from the end, it should be, If you're confused.

Obviously you, as the poet, can use any word you want to in order to create the effect you want. I just make these suggestions because you use such excellent grammar in the rest of your poem and these parts were not consistent with the rest of the poem. Maybe you had a reason for doing this.

I really like your poem. You use great, original, metaphors and your images are wonderful. There were many metaphors I liked so I can't pick one I liked the best but, I loved, "But life is not a movie so you cant press rewind."

In general, I'm impressed, you inspire me to start writing poetry again.

Answer 3

our getting there...keep writing!