my poem- is it good for a 14yr old?

Question

im sorry for all the sh*t ive caused
and im sorry for all ive done
im sorry for getting you so pissed off
and im sorry for not talking to my mum
i am trying as hard as i can
and yes i know thats a negitive word
but i do know ill get through this
just not as fast as a flying bird
im sorry for always being upset
im just waiting for all this sh*t to go through
go through this big, thick head of mine
cuz at the moment i havnt got a clue
got a clue on what is happening
or a clur on what to do
a clue on how to get past it
but hopefully ill get through
you helped me get past my problems
nd stop the cutting once of all
u helped me so f**ing much
and u were there to catch me i i was 2 fall
there is no word in this wrld
that can describe how much u have helped
you were there every second
nd u knew just how i felt
there is not much more 2 say
except ill always be dere for you
dae way u were there 4 me
ill always help u get through

Answer 1

This sounds like it's come straight from your heart! Whoever you've written this for sounds like they've helped you through a lot and in turn you wish to do the same for them. This is a very poignant and heart felt poem and, yes it is very good. If you haven't shown it to the person you wrote it about/for then please write them out a copy of it. They will be happy to receive it, we're sure. Sounds like you got caught up in the trap of self-harming.....congrats on having the strength and courage to realise that self-harming hurts you more than the cutting and scarring. In turn, because you know the pain involved you can go on to help others' caught in the trap....well done! Keep happy! ps...no matter how down you may feel in the future, express yourself through your poetry.....cut a good line with your poetry not on yourself! xxx

Answer 2

"Ice" via Gail Mazur interior the warming residing house, little ones lace their skates, bending, choked, over their thick jackets. A Franklin range retains the area so snug that's puzzling to think of why all and sundry might leave, clumping around the frozen coastline to the river. December's continually the comparable at Ware's Cove, the 1st sheer ice, black, then white and deep till the city sends automobiles of adult adult males with wood limitations to placed up the lads' hockey rink. An hour of skating after college, of attempting wobbly determine-8's, an hour of distances moved backwards without falling, then—twilight, the warming residing house steamy with ladies pulling on boots, their chafed legs aching. exterior, the hockey gamers save enjoying, slamming the around black %. till that's dark, till supper. At night, a shy woman comprises the cove together with her father. in spite of the undeniable fact that there is not any longer song, they flow arm in arm onto the blurred floor at the same time, braced like dancers. She thinks she'll on no account be so satisfied, for who else will locate her sleek, locate her suited, skate together with her in circles exterior the emptied rink perpetually?

Answer 3

I think it is nice.It does sound like you're trying to say something. If this is the case, I would re-read it and correct all the errors. If it is something you have just put together then I would just keep it the way it is. (Just my opinion)

Answer 4

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That was a pretty good poem! I'm 13, and I write poems when I have time, or when I'm bored.
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If you don't mind me asking...Who did you write this poem for? The person would be very happy, I'm sure.

Answer 5

Yes, it's good. I'm sure the person you wrote it for will love it. Pass it on.

Answer 6

SuperB

Answer 7

I AM 14 AND I LIKE IT.

Answer 8

Love it

Answer 9

i'm not really good at judging whether a poem is good or not.

perhaps you should brush up on your spelling though
and not swear :/

Answer 10

wow! amazing! really good, and touching too! Dont change a word of it! :)