I wrote this after a painful divorce years ago and the loss of my innocent upbringing. Just thought I'd share.
The flower sprouts, it seems so shy.
The leaves expand underneath the light.
A new life born for future despair,
But no one claimed that life was fair.
A flower of innocence knows no fear
But then, there is no innocence here.
The flower withers, it's substance dries,
It bows it's head and quietly dies.
2007-10-13 17:37:57 · 5 answers · asked by legal aide 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
The analogy is excellent. Flower evokes and connotes innocence and when it withers and "it's substance dries,
It bows it's head and quietly dies." That, indeed, expresses your state of mind quite profoundly.
You may want to express it all in timeless present tense. Hence, reconsider these instance of past tense: "But no one claimed that life was fair."
good luck in your endeavors after the painful divorce.
2007-10-13 18:22:51 · answer #1 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful. I'm going through a divorce and I can relate. In the beginning, you think your life is over but then the clouds pass and you realize that there is life after a break up.
2007-10-13 20:02:16 · answer #2 · answered by Kate 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
" It bows it's head and quietly dies. "
nice.
:)
2007-10-13 18:07:58 · answer #3 · answered by Roozbeh 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it it is very sad tho
2007-10-13 17:46:18 · answer #4 · answered by jas 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
succinct
i like it
2007-10-13 18:49:45 · answer #5 · answered by smittnlittlkitn 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋