The wishing well leads to hell;
Often it was where I fell.
Believing in a benign fate,
I detected the malignancy too late.
Love has succumbed to the growth
Of tumorous memories, mutated oaths;
The garden where we sowed the seeds
Is withered, rotting- choked by weeds.
A thorn is piercing through my skin:
I guess I've learned to feel again.
Pain and sorrow follow me,
I know them both intimately.
No one else can see my ghosts,
Wandering with me, pale and lost.
This is the specter still haunting me:
The spirit of the child that I never got to be.
2007-10-13 14:28:37 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
omg i love this poem. i hope you're not really this sad (ill pray for u just in case)
but neway i really love this poem
2007-10-13 14:55:17 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hidden Rejoice would be the title, with an addition to the end?
And yet I hope, with no faith lost
Believing truly at all cost
For I have never given in
To this wasteland of hopelessness, dark dungeon.
For I am a child of light you see
The trials are always before me
But I can endure for I am strong
Because I never walk alone.
2007-10-13 21:39:19 · answer #2 · answered by legal aide 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Really nice poem but it doesn't stick to a particular subject. Each stanza could be a separate poem. Try to be more cohesive next time. A good title could be In Soliloquy or Wishing Away.
2007-10-13 21:47:24 · answer #3 · answered by Crashovdr 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Fateful View. You might try it, that's the first thing that popped into my head. Sometime they are good and sometime bad. To me a lot of time I see myself standing beyond the scene and watching it unfold before me. That is always the View.
2007-10-13 22:01:45 · answer #4 · answered by Coop 366 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I loved this poem as you really had lots of feeling come thru.I loved how you compare sowing seed to rotting weeds,You are very good at this and i hope you;ll write more Thanks for sharing that was the best,.,.
2007-10-13 23:20:11 · answer #5 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a wonderful poem! Often these kinds of subjects are dark, but you've done quite well with expressing it.
How about.......... "Ghosts of Childhood"
2007-10-14 00:04:12 · answer #6 · answered by autumlovr 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wonderfully written and all too keenly felt. A title for it might be "Legacy."
2007-10-13 21:44:23 · answer #7 · answered by Chris B 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
" The Mucus Pit "
2007-10-13 21:32:48 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
interesting
2007-10-13 21:30:12 · answer #9 · answered by Rosa R 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You hum it, I'll play it.
2007-10-13 21:40:07 · answer #10 · answered by celtish 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋