A Poem for your consideration . . . . .?

Question

Life: From The Inside Out



There was a time when nothing worked for me;
every way I turned, no matter how hard I tried,
I’d always come up empty and on the losing side.

I’d ask myself was this the ‘real deal’
or some kharma from a life before
somehow inside I could feel a happier life;
a better place on some other peaceful shore.

“Can it be that the life I’m living
is within my own power to change?”
“Am I unknowingly arranging it,
can I also create a better way?”

“I can,” I said, “travel a better path
if only I choose to act and believe
in the power I have to re-create myself,
and all the good things I wish to achieve.”

Now, my dreams of another time and place
have become the reality
as I live a life of joy and grace
and make better choices along the way.

It’s easy to believe in a power that’s inside me
as it guides me through all of my days
because I’ve learned that life can only be “real”
when you find the right place to start …
and go with the flow of the River
that lies deep within your heart.

Answer 1

I love the theme of this poem. :)

If I may make a suggestion, try not to limit yourself to a rhyming scheme for this particular poem. Some lines rhyme and others don't, and it makes it difficult to follow the poem without thinking of whether there are rhyme and metre or not. It's a beautiful piece of work, and my worrying about whether I'm saying it right in my head distracts me from the positive message this poem conveys.

Good work, and keep writing!

Answer 2

This is heart felt and heart touched, I too have found a power
greater then my self. Blessings