Saturday.
11:26 a.m.
No sleep.
No shower.
Procrastinating to the point of death.
Feeling anxious about nothing.
Thinking of you.
Don’t really know why.
I’m getting nauseous.
Stomach is growling.
I’m not hungry.
Somewhere Dylan is playing softly.
“Ah get born, keep warm
Short pants, romance, learn to dance
Get dressed, get blessed
Try to be a success”
2007-10-13 06:28:23 · 4 answers · asked by Jonny 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Don't like it. It seems unfinished.
2007-10-13 06:36:50 · answer #1 · answered by magix151 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I disagree with it being unfinished. But I don't think Dylan is who you want to end this poem. I would much prefer to hear you comment back to Dylan, perhaps with a line or two that's already been written.
2007-10-13 15:41:17 · answer #2 · answered by Nathan D 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love it. I don't think you need the first two lines of Dylan, but the besides that, I think it's excellent. It says a lot in only a few words.
2007-10-13 19:57:52 · answer #3 · answered by Jon VS 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it very much. The introduction of Dylan into your poem is wonderful.
2007-10-13 20:10:21 · answer #4 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋