'Looking In'
You don't know me
You haven't seen what I've seen
You'd never think of highs and lows
Only lukewarm inbetween
You've seen me cry
You've wiped tears off my face
You can never know why
I feel such disgrace
You take my hand so tenderly
All at once I am made whole
I ask myself why is this stranger
Looking in my soul?
You've seen me at my worst
You've seen me at my best
You know me more than I think you do
You love me with the rest
You've seen into my deep dark past
You've seen everyone I blame
You've seen my secrets and my fears
You love me all the same
You look beyond my outside
You focus deep within
I'm wrong to call you stranger
You're an angel looking in
By smiley_queen_616
2007-10-13 02:21:59 · 7 answers · asked by Leila616 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I think you have a keeper
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2007-10-16 12:28:14 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
This is beautiful, I especially liked the last part about them not being a stranger but an angel. Well done (:
2007-10-13 10:18:27 · answer #2 · answered by Thalidinide 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh I love this. Your last stanza is wonderful! Great flow and I love the spiritual kind of poetry anyway.
Nice work.
2007-10-14 19:27:09 · answer #3 · answered by autumlovr 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like when you end it with 'I'm wrong to call you stranger'. That's a potent line in the poem. Good job.
2007-10-13 20:16:53 · answer #4 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thats very good, really thought provoking. My only comment would be that its not clear who the 'person' is
2007-10-13 10:10:28 · answer #5 · answered by alyson.earle 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it.
2007-10-13 10:16:36 · answer #6 · answered by Mary 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
its really good
2007-10-13 13:53:43 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋