Take a look around, do you still see me?
When you close your eyes , do you still feel me?
Love has begin to feel sad
Like a long lost dream I once had.
The miles have gotten longer
The longer im away from you.
My nights have become restless
My thoughts are moving so fast.
Forgive me for this, forgive me for loving.
My heart is hurting not knowing.
Knowing where you are.
Seperated by miles and attached by love
One thing I know is I can never have enough.
Enough of this love that is hurting my heart.
I close my eyes and your face is there.
I see your eyes and that intense stare..
I can still feel your hands touching my face
And your words that stick with me
In my sleep and in my thoughts,
I remember it all, the taste of your kiss
The smell of your skin on my pillow.
A love that will haunt me till the day I meet you again
A love that is with me everyday without end
This pain in my heart only grows and
The love that we shared, noone else will know.
Miles have brought us to this point
Just close your eyes and meet me in your dreams
You will see me there, waiting
I will give everything to you, if you only knew
My heart aches for you, a pain deep within
A pain I cannot live without, until our life begins.
2007-10-09 03:33:13 · 7 answers · asked by *starrynight* 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
There is a substance in your poem.
It is about physical love.
It has more of directness and less of allusion.
It speaks more of your age than of the quality.
it is not too bad to begin with.
2007-10-13 00:44:34 · answer #1 · answered by Ishan26 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I wonder why in the opening lines
you set me up to expect it to rhyme
then linger away, and then linger back
leaving me feeling a sense of lack
Judging poetry itself I find difficult or hard
this one, however, seems fit for a Hallmark card
2007-10-09 12:04:39 · answer #2 · answered by Think 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is so beautiful and perfect!!! I can definitely relate to your poem big time.Wow if you wrote that you did a excellent job and don't change a thing about it!!!
2007-10-09 10:49:57 · answer #3 · answered by swtlildarlin 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THere is a poetry section, this is the philo section
2007-10-09 11:12:30 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's intense...very intense
2007-10-09 10:44:25 · answer #5 · answered by Cube 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Love has 'begin' to feel sad" Spelling error; its 'began' :)
2007-10-09 12:47:00 · answer #6 · answered by indigo♥ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this poem is so gay
2007-10-09 10:42:13 · answer #7 · answered by erin l 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋