Is my poem enjoyable? How can I strengthen it?

Question

Greenland: Future Beach Paradise

That’s right,
get in now
get in on the ground floor
of this amazing real estate opportunity

Be there when
Jack Frost fumbles his grip
and the Arctic sheds ice

While St. Nickolas is busy removing
his jacket, cap, gloves
be busy burying your toes in newly uncovered sand

While other people are fighting malnutrition and vector-disease
you’ll have the beach tan that say’s “I told you so.”

20 -30 - even 100 acre lots are available for-ice cubes on the glacier
Act now
Don’t be a grumpy polar bear with no place to go

I guess I need to be clear that this poem is based on irony and satire.

I think it's horrible, what's happening with globial warming. By giving the narrator a "pro globial warming" stance, I hope to expose some of the serious issues humanity is dealing with.

Answer 1

I wonder whether some of the above have read your additional explanation - kind of quite cynical.
However, after your short explanation, it sounds to me a very excellent poem with amazing mastery of irony and genuine concern about the environment. I have no idea about some of the things mentioned but I get the impression that some folks are suffocating with the need to make a quick buck while others are suffocating under the yoke of diseases and poverty!!
Magnificent piece I'd say.


good luck

Answer 2

It's good because ur trying to make a point about what is happening in the world such as: environment causes, diseases,exc.

Answer 3

Sorry, I don't care for it. I think it is sad. The ice melting, animals with no homes, and humans taking over once again....only to make things worse.......for $$$$$$

Answer 4

yeah is good because like you said some people are trying to make money over our environment and they don't that it will come and harm us later so i like it and i feel the same way. some people are selfish and careless to know of other people feeling especially for animals and nature. good job.

Answer 5

Not my kinda thing

Answer 6

garbage