how do you write a poem that hides the pain?

Question

does it show on your face when you smile in vain?
how do you hold back the tears so no one knows
the creeping sadness from your thousand sorrows?
black seeping from your mangled rotting heart
solace..solace! before it gets too dark....


...there! anyways...the main Q is...How do you write a poem that hides the pain? =D

can you please give me a line or two to start with?
thank you... =)

Answer 1

If I get you clearly, this is basically what you are saying:

You are hiding pain! Your heart is deeply hurt and confused. You strive to be the happy, fun-loving person you once were but fail. Something in your life may have hurt you so deeply that you cannot seem to pull yourself back together and are constantly on the verge of falling apart. You are seemingly in a sea of darkness, in search of the light. .
How to express that in a poem?


What about this:

"Are you in any pain, dizziness, nausea?"

I could say "yes,... It has enough repetition to be a poem or a children's book, and enough..."
She was breathing hard and in obvious pain.
Forman heard House coming and looked up ... saying,
"have Forman write you a pain script, you might want to get a ... for a broken tail bone."
It would hurt like hell until it healed. Still grinning...



Good luck

Answer 2

In answer to your question, I always know that my poems will require editing at a later stage, so I am never completely satisfied. This though, on the contrary should have made you feel very satisfied indeed when you completed it. Like Benny has said, I do not feel either, that this was completed in 5 minutes. I have read it several times and it has a wonderful air of mystery. Love which is unattainable. I do not think it refers to a person either, I think it is love itself. Something which is longed for but is never fulfilled. "Her limbs grow stiff and rough too soon". In fact the whole of the last stanza to me is saying that the author has accepted he will not find true love and it is a source of pain and regret. This is a lovely piece of writing and you should be proud of it. Perhaps you are referring to The Goddess of Love or Venus. When I read this madrigal flashes were coming into my mind of The Venus de Milo Now tell me I'm completely off the mark (lol), but that is what it meant to me and very lovely it was as well.

Answer 3

Did general Custer hide his fear Or did he yield a solitary tear Did Lord Nelson yield a cry When he felt the bullet enter his eye Did Jim Bowie think of his wife - When Mexican bayonets threatened his life These were brave men who showed no fear When death crept ever stealthier near The world is full of men so brave Who fear nothing not even the grave That we all die is a fact of life But to die alone is not very nice

Answer 4

a poem is an expression of inner deep feelings couched in choicest words of selected beauty. Inner feelings meaning you let or get your bare emotions inside out. that's the purpose of poetry. you can masquerade in the facade (I rhyme) you create but the readers can unmask your trauma just the same. if you must write under a veil, don't trust the medium of poetry. Write prose in the form of an essay or article, and do your writing in biting sarcasm to hide the pain!

Answer 5

i;m not a writer but your poem is really good.Go over it and speak your heart and write the beginning ; middle and end.With what you have ; your on your way...Nice work /

Answer 6

it's rather difficult
maybe using plenty of figures of speech, very elaborated ones

Answer 7

let me try haha.

hide and seek,
feeling weak,
covered by a shadow
which i cannot follow.

haha. this one is original so please don't expect too much.