I need help adapting the first verse of George Strait's "Check Yes or No". I am a guy, and my girlfriend and I are both in the 11th grade. Basically, I want to have an original way of asking her to our winter dance, and this song is perfect, if I can only adapt it to my life...
My problem is that I am about as adept at writing poetry as your regular scientist, so I would be really appreciative if anyone here can help me out... Who knows, might be a few points involved for the best answer?
What I want changed in the song is this section:
A pink dress, a matching bow, and her pony tail.
She kissed me on the school bus, but told me not to tell.
Next day I chased her round the playground
Across the monkey bars, to the merry-go-round
Clearly, in 11th grade we don't go on the playground anymore :( and girls don't wear pink dresses either. My gf dresses normally, not preppy or w/e.
If anyone can somehow find a way to make this work, you will be my new best friend! (not really sry :p)
2007-10-07 17:55:58 · 3 answers · asked by drklordslayer 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I forgot to add that the name of the dance is Christmas Ball.. If that can be included, that would be great.
Thanks again to anyone giving this a try!
2007-10-07 18:13:03 · update #1
You might like this. I've kept the poetic beat of each line so that you can sing it like the original song:
A cute dress, a matching smile, my heart rose and fell.
She kissed me on the way home, but told me not to tell.
Next day I chased her in front of all
All the way from our classroom to the Christmas ball.
2007-10-07 19:16:13 · answer #1 · answered by Doc Watson 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A pink tank, a matching hair tie
One look and makes me sore to the sky
Next day I seen her wearing something blue
If only I could tell her on how my love for her is true
I pray on the stars at night
That twinkle like the ones in her eyes so bright
That you'd give me one chance
That you'd go with me to the Winter dance
Hope it helps.
2007-10-07 18:01:13 · answer #2 · answered by Jules or Juliet 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A pair of jeans, some flip flops and her shiney hair.
I kissed her at the movies, we are a great young pair.
Next day I saw her walking down the hall
I asked "How about us two together at the Christmas Ball?"
2007-10-08 05:54:47 · answer #3 · answered by q-tip 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋