Could you please check any grammatical errors in this sentence? Thanks?

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If the calculation that we used is based on the data before the revision, their forward funding will be in minus position. But if we used the data that they have revised, the position of the forward funding will be one month (excluding incremental funding). However, we will review the pipeline and forward funding for IN ACCE in order to get the figures for appropriate pipeline and forward funding.

Answer 1

If the calculation used is based on the data before revision, forward funding will be in a minus position. But, if we use the revised data, forward funding will be one month excluding incremental funding. However, we will review the data and forward fund for IN ACCE to get figures for the appropriate pipeline.

Eliminate use of the word 'that', speak in present tense rather than past tense, eliminate redundancy and wordiness.

Answer 2

In the first two sentences, it's better to say "we use" In the 2d sentence, it's better to say "the data after the revision" (were the data revised or was something else revised?) The last sentence doesn't make sense and appears redundent (do you review funding to get the figures for funding?)

Answer 3

int the first sentence, it should read in THE minus positon. with the word the missing from yours obviously.

thats the only thing i can see.

Answer 4

put a comma after But and you should be good

"But, if we used the data"

Answer 5

i see nothing